Geno wrote:Sam. wrote:Damn ! the focus of the feed around here is always only on the rhymes and nothing more ,what about the actual verse ,multis aren't always Imp you know ,no shots fired at anyone .
Just waiting for some one some thing more cuz Gennette already mentioned about the rhymes .
I also said the hook is great and would fit a female singer. The vibe of the song gives off a dark harpsichord feel for what a beat would sound like and the concept is great.
What more do you want?
Hesky wrote:Not bad bad collabo at all. Zabe's opening verse was enough to make me went to read on, on point and delivered well. Sam followed suit really, some nice bars in there. Nice ending to your 16 too. Eminememy's verse started off cold, but warmed up towards the end. Didn't really bring the overall quality down with the save. Psycho-esque hook though haha. I liked it overall Good stuff.
If anyone is writing a collab piece in the near future, let me know. I'd love to hop on board!
Eminememy wrote:Hesky, in the next week or so I might post another collab sign up in the lounge. I might do it this weekend if I get my homework done.
Matt Holck wrote:maybe write about the act of chopping onion to make a tuna casserole
Eminememy wrote:[Chorus - Eminememy]
Why am I killin' your kids?
Cause I love you
Why am I silting your wrists?
Cause I love you
Why am spilling your blood
Cause I love you
Don't mistake this for love, I'm
Committing a love crime
[Verse 1 - Zabe]
There ain't no definition of all the crimes I commit
There's always repetition of the same time I flip
Out on you, because you couldn't love me for who I am
Shout at you and always shoving you to make me calm
This isn't what I envisioned when I ended up killing your dad
The shit he said to split us made me willing to stab
I went down to his basement and found a used dildo
Turns out he was fucking you, swallowing your pills so
I fucking shot him, right in the fuckin head
I sat down in a chair and waited until his head bled
OK, I'm sorry, I fucked your mom while I was there
Look, sweetie, I'm fine, don't run away scared
Let's rob a bank, shoot a priest, kill a whole country
If you do this stuff with me, it'll always show you love me
If we've only got a few more seconds left
Let's commit in a matrimony of love crimes and sudden death
[Chorus - Eminememy]
Why am I killin' your kids?
Cause I love you
Why am I silting your wrists?
Cause I love you
Why am spilling your blood
Cause I love you
Don't mistake this for love, I'm
Committing a love crime
[Verse 2 - Sam]
Big city ,big lights you came here to make your nest right ,
seeing what it had to offer ,coudn't stop thanking jesus christ,
overwhelmed by over-night succces dreams your inner actress cried,
with closed eyes you ignored that false-ness prize,
sold yourself for fame wasn't probably a best buy,
coudn't stop your agents advances ,even though lust lies ,
treated as a fiend ,now you confess this tears to the sun rise ,
made it to your apartment room but i was in for a sur-prise ,
your my obsession ,dare he touch you ,now he must die ,
pulled him of you and stabbed him in the guts tight ,
chopped him and left the pieces on the floor taking dust bites,
while your impatient toes depicted what relief was like ,
her hugs relieves the fact that i won this trust fight ,
let me lick blood of your naked body ,she says "yeah !it's just fine",
w'll dispose of the body later cuz now we have enough time ,
to have sex together and commit some love crimes .
[Verse 3 - Eminememy]
Yo, Sam, I’m above crimes, but dawg, I love your lines
Everyone else don’t wast my time, I can fucking rhyme!
But every now n’ again, I commit some love crimes
Now heres a story of mine, we all know GameTheory
Love him to death but he isn’t the same guy as Cream
So he’s now hanged on a tree, I know his fate is funny
But we all share this creepy dream, lucky I didn’t shred you
Don’t know where I’d fled to, blood and shit draws feds, dude
What would that have led too? Well, after your sad lynching
I went to your house and burst into laughter in your kitchin
The wife was fucking bitching, so I had to start shooting
It turned into a thong looting, but that’s another story
It’s just another summer fury created by a lover like me
Eminememy is a cover for peace, man, I just loved these lines
But the shit I just did is what I defined as a love crime
[Chorus 2X - Eminememy]
Why am I killin' your kids?
Cause I love you
Why am I silting your wrists?
Cause I love you
Why am spilling your blood
Cause I love you
Don't mistake this for love, I'm
Committing a love crime
Sam. wrote::worship:
Thanks man ,i know i fucked up some multis mainly cuz i was gonna make it a 3 Syllable Rhyme Verse but later changed my mind ,that's why the fuck up.
Yup ! we should collab some day .
Eminememy wrote:Thanks Wreck, if you want to collab you could check the Still Alive topic in the lounge
Wreck wrote:Sam. wrote::worship:
Thanks man ,i know i fucked up some multis mainly cuz i was gonna make it a 3 Syllable Rhyme Verse but later changed my mind ,that's why the fuck up.
Yup ! we should collab some day .
It's all good, I understand where you're coming from there, that happens to MCs a lot, nothing out of the ordinary, but I like ya style regardless, & your flow/lyrics from reading this.
Yeah definitely. Btw, are you guys actually recording this song, or is it just a written collab? Just curious.
Menzo wrote:Lmao, you gotta love Zabe / SG...guy's so underrated.
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