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18 bars of some new shit

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18 bars of some new shit

Postby RainMan44 » Sep 14th, '11, 20:53

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They tell me, "Man, I'm really feelin' ya passionite rhymes..
When's the album out?," I just tell 'em, "Classics take time"
I don't just sit around doin' nothin', waitin' for my ass to get signed
If you little fucks had atleast half of a mind
You would bow down, 'cause you see, the kid has arrived
And I swear, I'm one of the last real spitterz alive
One day, sold out concerts, the women'll cry
The groupies back stage beggin' to grab dinner with I
Haha, nah, I just want to make it on that list
And if you don't hear your name then- take it as a diss
Pun, Big, Nas, Em, Pac, and L
Jay, Rakim, Wu-Tang,....Rock The Bells
I can only dream of one day grabbin' that mic, and havin' that night
Devoted to my only true love: rappin', despite
The countless creative blocks I've encountered, I'm free
You hear that sound of a beast? Stomach growlin'? It's me
So get down on 1 knee, I'm hungry and it's time to eat
...and all you MC's lookin' like fine cuisine :snack:
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: 18 bars of some new shit

Postby Sam. » Sep 15th, '11, 13:56

This gave me the feeling as if it was written for a collab because the lyrics seemed aggressive to me .You gotta record this tbh .

And hell with Geno :shifty:

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Re: 18 bars of some new shit

Postby RainMan44 » Sep 16th, '11, 20:24

thanks for the feed y'all :y:


I returned the favor on the requested links :b:
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: 18 bars of some new shit

Postby Mr.DGAF » Sep 16th, '11, 20:32

Really liked this. Started off really strong, and stayed that way. The flow was bananas on it too, went the whole way without a hitch. The first two lines are my favorite though, they set the tone for the piece perfectly.

Feed my ish? : http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=125972
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How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: 18 bars of some new shit

Postby RainMan44 » Sep 16th, '11, 20:37

Mr.DGAF wrote:Really liked this. Started off really strong, and stayed that way. The flow was bananas on it too, went the whole way without a hitch. The first two lines are my favorite though, they set the tone for the piece perfectly.

Feed my ish? : http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=125972



Thanks a lot for the feed homie :y:

I'll def feed your piece :b:
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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