Money Can't Make The Man

[RainMan44]

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A man ain't to be defined by material goods
Or need to pack a gun to be feared in the hood
So be aware of why they tru-ly acknowledge you
Is it 'cause you got heart, or is it 'cause your wallet grew?
Is it 'cause of the shit you got when you hit the block? And flash rangs?
If so, then it must be a cash thang
See, if you gettin' love for the all of the wrong reasons,
Then you should be warned that it's bound to be a long season
Cuz when these snakes strike at late night...you got war
So you better watch for, enemies who just waitin' to burst through ya locked doors
Cuz the very own ones that you eat with?
Can very well be the same ones behind the gun when the heat spit
Speak with..a friendly tone
When in reality you a stranger and they can't wait to put a slug through the enemy's dome





(Chorus)
Now I know they say that, you can't break a fam
But lookout for those handshakes, 'cause damn
Man make the money, money can't make the man
I said man make the money, money can't make the man

[RainMan44]

Pretty good piece. A little short, but that's okay. It flowed great and the rhymes were decent. I'd suggest challenging yourself to make them a little more complex and really mess around with different schemes.

Hook was good too, I liked it.

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Thanks a lot man. I actually just finished up writing my album, so most of the shit I'm writing now is just light little pieces here and there that aren't taken that seriously. Just trying to build up some momentum. But once I get a concept for a new album, I'll be much more locked in and focused on every tiny technical aspect. Definitely something I want to get more into.


Thanks for the feed, G.