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Interlude of a Nerd [TRACK 5]

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Interlude of a Nerd [TRACK 5]

Postby SG. » Sep 16th, '11, 11:46

Submitted this for Too Late For This for B. Nutz, then realised it was completely off-topic, so I asked for deletion. Here's the verse. Make of it what you will.

Stick in the cartridges, no loading
Stick in the CDs, too much loading
Guess what? I am a retro gamer
Not a gambler or a cheater but a player
Yeah, girl, I'm all fingers and thumbs
You put your hands on my joystick, are you fucking dumb?
NES, SNES and Genesis
I said I was fucking addicted and that was evidence
Now where do we find Zabe today?
He bought a Wii so he could buy games from back in the day
Mario, Sonic and fucking Actraiser
I'm so niche I've got Earthbound on a Motorola Razor!
Eventually I managed to catch up with the pack
I bought a PS3 and played CoD for the craic
I go on matchmaking so I can talk some smack
I'm a nerd, anyone got a problem with that?

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Re: Interlude of a Nerd [TRACK 5]

Postby SG. » Sep 17th, '11, 15:11

Bump
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Re: Interlude of a Nerd [TRACK 5]

Postby J.R. » Sep 17th, '11, 15:17

Honestly, the multis were lacking, but the flow was truly amazing, and i had told you this over PM.

Some of your best work

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Re: Interlude of a Nerd [TRACK 5]

Postby SG. » Sep 17th, '11, 15:18

Already did. :y:
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Re: Interlude of a Nerd [TRACK 5]

Postby J.R. » Sep 17th, '11, 15:23

Zabe wrote:Already did. :y:

Ik, lol I'm copying that to all Feeds I make.
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Re: Interlude of a Nerd [TRACK 5]

Postby Man1x » Sep 17th, '11, 15:31

Stick in the cartridges, no loading
Stick in the CDs, too much loading

it had a good flow, the multis were lacking like B.Nutz said but these lines I don't like for some reason. It might be all the repetition, IDK, I just don't think the same words flow the same as a rhyme, it feels wierd to me and feels lazy. Anyway, good piece bro, your improving :y:
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Re: Interlude of a Nerd [TRACK 5]

Postby SG. » Sep 17th, '11, 15:33

Eminememy wrote:Stick in the cartridges, no loading
Stick in the CDs, too much loading

it had a good flow, the multis were lacking like B.Nutz said but these lines I don't like for some reason. It might be all the repetition, IDK, I just don't think the same words flow the same as a rhyme, it feels wierd to me and feels lazy. Anyway, good piece bro, your improving :y:


Where's the feed on the other one you owe me? >:( Just kidding, thanks.
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Re: Interlude of a Nerd [TRACK 5]

Postby Sam. » Sep 17th, '11, 16:05

:shakehead:
This track is not written well apart from the Imagination / Concept nothing was good .
Don't hurry in writing be calm and take time .
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Re: Interlude of a Nerd [TRACK 5]

Postby SG. » Sep 17th, '11, 16:07

Sam. wrote::shakehead:
This track is not written well apart from the Imagination / Concept nothing was good .
Don't hurry in writing be calm and take time .


I don't like throwing away verses. I imagine this being read in the stereotypical nerd voice, hence it being an interlude. So yeah, I'm going to pretend this was deliberately shit. :sweating:
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