Mirror, Mirror. [LP Track 8]

[J.R.]

[Notice]This song is entirely not true. Some parts may be, but as far as you are concerned, they are not!
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[Intro]
Mirror, Mirror, On the wall,
Why do they judge me, most of all?
Why do they shove me, on the floor?
Why don't they love me, anymore?
What did I do, to deserve these laughs?
I was always a nice guy, in my past,
Now my wrists are red, and my face is blue,
I am dead, and now I'm erasing you.


[Verse 1]
I had Red Wrist, Was wearing long sleeves,
My arm? Bled it, Felt like I Didn't belong see?
But it went and stained Through my laundry,
the shirt was lent, so my Mommmy,
Assumed it didn't belong to me,
But she was wrong, See, I had struck myself,
I Had Cut my welts, I had Stuck thyself,
With a knife and I twisted it up and down,
thought my life was taken, my wrist started to bleed out now,
Couldn't hear no damn beat or sound, Let alone see no ground.
Heard the doc say "He was found, with no peeps around,"
Was rushed downtown, Emergency care,
Was stuffed and bound, there was no Hurting me there,
Uncle and aunt came, not a word to share,
I had hit a vein, was too hurt to care,
Doc asked for a motive, Asked god please why,
Did you have to go, and take this little kids life?
I looked at him and said; "I'm not gonna die,
Just a few minor cuts, and besides this is all in my imagination,
I went and made you up, So if you could relax and get your fixation,
Off of me, I would be very glad, No one else is scared or mad,
I just don't wanna share my past."

[Chorus]
Oh mirror mirror, what if this happened,
What if I , gave up the only thing that kept me laughin,
Oh Mirror mirror, Why do you have a crack,
Oh, I thought my reflection punched me,
so I punched it back...



[Line explanation]
some lines could be considered confusing.

First off, "Share my past" line, Is a metaphor. For how I refuse to dive further in this subject, it gives away the reason the song is so short. This was inspired by advice from Sam.

[Sam.]

I'll start off with the hook here because it blew my mind the moment i read it ,usually I ignore feeding the hooks in pieces but this was some great work that I coudn't resist .

Onto the Verse .
That was a good start that you gave ,but streching the same wrist slit thing over 3 bars was not needed .The flow was not a big problem more of a continous spiting .Nice story line and the way you twisted the plot was nice ,really caught me ha ha .

I saw the side note that you gave, you edited the verse at the last moment ??

[J.R.]

No, that was originally intended. Thanks for the feed btw.

[Sam.]

No, that was originally intended. Thanks for the feed btw.

Coincidence ?

[J.R.]

No, that was originally intended. Thanks for the feed btw.

Coincidence ?

no

[J.R.]

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