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14 Tabs of Perfection Ft. Spyder

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14 Tabs of Perfection Ft. Spyder

Postby J.R. » Oct 11th, '11, 20:21

B.Nutz Feed: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=130754
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Spyder wrote:I got a story for you cats that will make you actually laugh
I had these fourteen tabs of perfection I jacked from rehab.
I popped em all, then saw a tall dude could prolly snap me in half
Raced up hit em the face so much his cavity cracked.
He drew back… didn’t phase me, need to practice his jab
Cops see him deck me so get arrested and packed in the cab
I started it, high and got off, man im glad for these tabs
Then he got busted for pills, that’s some rich shit like your majesty ass!


I got attraction, and it leaves me in troublin ways
That’s tab one just seems like im stuck in replay.
Op tracks done I scheme to fuckin utter charades
To get the bad son deeds over and done for the day.
Now that my backs numb I can ease and slumber away
Nope, back in the bath-room I dream, fumble and fade
Get a glass from, behind ream a tab til it crumbles and breaks
when asked whats, my life like its always summed up in pain.


[Chorus]
1..2...3....4,
Ain't afraid to take many more,
Tabs are what I enjoy,
Perfection is what they deply,
I take 14 at a time...
Proud to be out of my mind..
With these 14 tabs of perfection

B.Nutz wrote:

I start off with Four, take my shit Together,
Add somre More,Too many to Use? Never,
I start to Blend my meds, Leaves me with No hope,
I try to Pen Instead, Believe I need dos mas To cope,
Call it my Home medical department, I used to Reach for the sky
He became a Drone that he started, He used to Preach to the guy,
He's into Drugs and shit, He'll Take eight at a time,
Wouldn't trade for a Hug and kiss, Fell for em like Bait on a line
He's doing just straight in his mind, Meanwhile, he gets raped from behind..
By these addictive tabs, Buying a bit for a dime, Can't even think up a rhyme,
They're vindictive fags, But he loves the feeling he get's,
Refusing to give up the grasp, takes just a few more hits,
Just waiting to Overdose, and be shocked to death,
Gonna be Comatose, Drugs? They done rocked and left,
Wow..They've basically done fucked him up,
Stuck a hole in heart, and done sucked it shut,
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Re: 14 Tabs of Perfection Ft. Spyder

Postby Sam. » Oct 11th, '11, 21:20

Spyder

Seems like there was some mis-communication between you two regarding the bars needed for this because your verse had two different directions to it.The verse was not even cohesive at all smh. The 1st Part was not phrased properly in my opinion because I had to read this twice to get what was going on.But you told a nice Story as far as I could comprehend .Moving on to the 2nd Part,now this seemed as if this was written 1st and then the 1st Part.Now this was dope as hell.Good long Multis you put in which added flavors to the whole verse.I liked this lines a lot.


To get the bad son deeds over and done for the day.
Now that my backs numb I can ease and slumber away
Nope, back in the bath-room I dream, fumble and fade


Well I can't think of anything to criticise you because you are a "Text Champion" afterall.It's just that the verse could have been cohesive you know.


Yo B.Nutz I'll feed you tomorrow because I have been Feeding Verses whole day so my eyes are tired.Don't mind. :b:
[Rollefsen] - SajN retired, bitch got old, unlike Sams "ladies".
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Re: 14 Tabs of Perfection Ft. Spyder

Postby Spyder » Oct 12th, '11, 01:13

he told me we were doing a verse where we love em and a verse where we hate em :'(
so i thought 64 lines woulda been silly i told him eight. thats why mine are divided like that,
basically was a big mis-communication but oh well man still wasnt my best piece.
im in a different mind setting :shifty:

EDIT: and yes verse two was written first :laughing: its like you fuckin know me :o
i was struggling to say i liked the pills. so when i thought it was two separate verses,
verse two was written first cause i feel that way. verse one is a lie pure LIE
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Re: 14 Tabs of Perfection Ft. Spyder

Postby Sam. » Oct 12th, '11, 12:48

Spyder wrote:he told me we were doing a verse where we love em and a verse where we hate em :'(
so i thought 64 lines woulda been silly i told him eight. thats why mine are divided like that,
basically was a big mis-communication but oh well man still wasnt my best piece.
im in a different mind setting :shifty:

EDIT: and yes verse two was written first :laughing: its like you fuckin know me :o
i was struggling to say i liked the pills. so when i thought it was two separate verses,
verse two was written first cause i feel that way. verse one is a lie pure LIE

I guessed what happened when I just took a look at the verse,the gap between the verses gave it away.As far as the order of the Parts of the verse is concerned, the 2nd Part was more well written as compared to the 1st Part which seemed hurried so I thought that.
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