I Declare War

[RainMan44]

Beat: http://www.shadowville.com/122213/genre ... eclare-war

LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=137016

I start the first bar after the first kick....Not necessarily on time, just a bit delayed so the line fits the bar. I'm sure y'all will catch the flow of it after a couple tries.

(I take about half a bar off before "on some real shit"....and the "prototype" line carries over to the next bar)


(Verse 1)

Every time I sit poised with this pen
It's time again, to seperate the boys from the men
It's gettin' old now...I know you tired of hearin' me bring it up
Time and time again.....in my rhymes, but when
All I see around me is a bunch of cats with a mic, with no fire,
I grow tired, and my appetite for destruction happens to strike
Then I yearn for the satisfaction I get when grabbin' a mic
And lettin' these suckers know they luck is low, fuck it though
............................on some real shit
The radio, I don't understand how some of y'all can feel it
Either I'm deaf, or I ain't catchin' on with the new trends
And I don't know what's what, who's out and who's in
SYKE, you motherfuckers are the product of the industry based on a prototype
The A&R's brainstormed with dough in mind
So behold the shinin' diamond in the rough, but don't stare for
Too long, 'cause I now declare war

(Chorus)
I...Declare...War on these weak cats
Better come equipped with some deep raps
If not, know your bound to be slain quick
Can't help it, I just can't stand to hear a lame spit

[Sam.]

Nice choice of beat.

This shit is perfectly written to the beat. Every Rhyme and Multi connected properly, that helped flowing through the Verse much easily. Flowing with beat was hard when I 1st read it, then I saw that you're missing half a Bar on purpose, that solved the problem right there. The only way the I could Flow through this was with a laid back approach.

Correct me if I'm wrong; by the time that particular line("on some real shit") comes up, there's some activity in the beat that you used to cover up the gap right? I think you did that.

The content was cocky at the same time very flashy, the start was a little bore to me but later on you picked up. Overall the content could have been better, something different. I picked up the direction that you were aiming with this, but it could have been said in a different manner. It's not wack, I'm not saying that, it's just that it could have been better than what it is now.