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Travis Touchdown

Postby SG. » Jan 15th, '12, 01:38

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QjlFqgRbICY

There's no more heroes in this world right now
Even married men comply with girls' vice vows
This hot secretary just gives me a call
A dream bribe is her just licking my balls
How did I get into this? I'm being assimilated
This shit isn't as thrilling as I anticipated
I have entered into the Garden of Madness
About this bloodlust, I've started to have it
I'd touchdown on a small night, just after a tall flight
They've got rounds on all sights, falling off my wall, right?
All the king's men can't fix them, misconstructed
I'd thought I'd murder, kill and bitches would love it
I want an otaku life, with anime girls and robot white
This secretary ain't looking so hot, milk goes off, right?
I used to think this town was my sole providence
Now all I can see here is a zone of violence

LOF: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=142474&p=1841394#p1841394

For those who don't understand the concept: http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Travis_Touchdown
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Re: Travis Touchdown

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jan 15th, '12, 03:50

This is really nice dude. The first half I was kind of like ehhh, but it really picked up. The flow is on point, the rhyming is some of the best stuff I've seen from ya. I'm not too knowledgable on the topic, but it's obvious you are, you fit everything important in there in a very smooth way, which is quite impressive. I like it man, not too much to say because it's pretty short. But some good stuff, none-the-less.
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: Travis Touchdown

Postby SG. » Jan 15th, '12, 09:46

Thanks, it's just a little practice verse since I haven't written in ages.
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Re: Travis Touchdown

Postby J.R. » Jan 16th, '12, 01:20

Really good tbh. The first half was actually something I enjoyed more than the second, opposite of DGAF. But whatever. Keep it up. :y:
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Re: Travis Touchdown

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Jan 16th, '12, 03:53

Hahahaha. Now I wanna play No More Heroes because of this. This is great. Rhyming's improved, definitely flowing, but it seems too short. You know? Other than that, no issues here dude. Keep it up! :y:
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Re: Travis Touchdown

Postby SG. » Jan 17th, '12, 22:08

Thanks for the feed, ma dudes.
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