What is this?

[JamaicanPattlez]

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There's something about the music that you can vibe and just sit to,
When you're feeling that emotion, you can cry and get pissed to,
It can also make you choose between a knife and a pistol,
And take you to the truth leading to lies and the misuse,
Politicians always question the best interest for us,
When our mission isn't less than how they're injuring us,
Look down the road, homes are closing down rapidly,
They took down our doors, goes and posts it now happily,
Now who really wins? The men who have plenty already,
This is like a sleazy sin, cause when will many have pennies?
But they ignore the issue, so they blame it on Hip Hop,
And they enforce that they can get you, so they're placing a lip lock,
On those bold enough to go ahead and speak what they're thinking,
Yet they wonder why teens are resulting to doing speed and start drinking,
If rap is the blame for the crap in our brains,
Then the fact that remains is that there's crack in power reigns.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Thanks bro!

[JamaicanPattlez]

I liked this man, we already talked about it before but like I said, you're evolving as a writer. The rhymes are less noticeable and smoother and the internals are fantastic throughout.

This was on some real shit, which is always the best Keep it up dude!

Yeah, hah. 'Sall good. Thanks bro!

[J.R.]

Pretty decent topic, I like it. keep at it.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Thanks.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Hmmm... odd, lol. Okay, thanks. Back to the drawing board.

[TonyTilt]

LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=142474

There's something about the music that you can vibe and just sit to,
When you're feeling that emotion, you can cry and get pissed to,
It can also make you choose between a knife and a pistol,
And take you to the truth leading to lies and the misuse,
Politicians always question the best interest for us,
When our mission isn't less than how they're injuring us,
Look down the road, homes are closing down rapidly,
They took down our doors, goes and posts it now happily,
Now who really wins? The men who have plenty already,
This is like a sleazy sin, cause when will many have pennies?
But they ignore the issue, so they blame it on Hip Hop,
And they enforce that they can get you, so they're placing a lip lock,
On those bold enough to go ahead and speak what they're thinking,
Yet they wonder why teens are resulting to doing speed and start drinking,
If rap is the blame for the crap in our brains,
Then the fact that remains is that there's crack in power reigns.

I really like this a lot! It reminds me completely of Eminems verse on "Fight Music" I think if you ever put this to audio you should use that beat.

[SG.]

Damn, this is good. Why you hate us, JP?

Alright, it's a commonly used topic so it's relatable. The rhymes are less noticeable and much smoother as Menzo said. Tbh I can't add to what has been said already. Now hurry up and start that audio shizzness.

[JamaicanPattlez]

LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=142474

There's something about the music that you can vibe and just sit to,
When you're feeling that emotion, you can cry and get pissed to,
It can also make you choose between a knife and a pistol,
And take you to the truth leading to lies and the misuse,
Politicians always question the best interest for us,
When our mission isn't less than how they're injuring us,
Look down the road, homes are closing down rapidly,
They took down our doors, goes and posts it now happily,
Now who really wins? The men who have plenty already,
This is like a sleazy sin, cause when will many have pennies?
But they ignore the issue, so they blame it on Hip Hop,
And they enforce that they can get you, so they're placing a lip lock,
On those bold enough to go ahead and speak what they're thinking,
Yet they wonder why teens are resulting to doing speed and start drinking,
If rap is the blame for the crap in our brains,
Then the fact that remains is that there's crack in power reigns.

I really like this a lot! It reminds me completely of Eminems verse on "Fight Music" I think if you ever put this to audio you should use that beat.

Yo, I should! Thanks for the feed!

Damn, this is good. Why you hate us, JP?

Alright, it's a commonly used topic so it's relatable. The rhymes are less noticeable and much smoother as Menzo said. Tbh I can't add to what has been said already. Now hurry up and start that audio shizzness.

Hahahaha. I've been working on some audio shit as of late, so one day I shall drop. Soon. Thanks for the feed, man!

[autotooner]

Sounds good.