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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby BigBoss » Jan 28th, '12, 23:09

Trimss wrote:
iain08 wrote:>talks about haters
>has no fans


Instead of talking shit like that, feed his writing. Eminem talks about killing people, does that mean he does it? No.

That's just hating to hate. Next time you wanna look clever, do it in a better way. :flutter:

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iain08 wrote:>talks about haters
>has no fans

This.


At least lil wayne has (shitty) fans.

Same here. You're always there to bash members here but you're still useless.
You cant say fuck haters when no ond is bumpin yo shit


True, heres my feed:

Quit rap. You and Demaz. EmBase was right.
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby Trimss » Jan 28th, '12, 23:10

^ Good, now you can also give arguments to construct a proper discussion. But hey, that's better. :y:
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby Atone » Jan 28th, '12, 23:18

Honestly Sweet Tooth, i'm gonna put it this way, i have been writing for 11 years, i have heard it all,

You suck
your trash
wanna be Eminem
never be shit
quit
just give up

yeah your good man, you should sign this autograph (sarcastic)
can i keep this rap you wrote? i ran outta toilet paper

oh, and the best part, i'v had teachers in school tell me i'm wasting my time
high school principal even disliked it

you know why i still write? cuz i'm not writing for people like you, i'm writing because it's something i love

i may not be the next Hova, or the next Shady, or even the next Lil Wayne, i don't want to be, none of that shit matters, so when ppl like you tell me i should stop, i laugh.

cuz 20 ppl tell me to stgop but there's 5 that enjoy it, and thats what matters, that ppl enjoy it

so once again, call me retarded, take your personal shots and short bus jokes, do it, i don't care man, it does not effect me, it just shows that i am better than you because your life sucks so bad you have to be negative towards somebody on an internet forum....
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby Trimss » Jan 28th, '12, 23:21

^ you know I have nothing against you bro, having 5 people liking your shit doesn't mean you DON'T have to improve.

So staying on beat and having a better quality are the next steps for you bro. Keep up
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby Atone » Jan 28th, '12, 23:31

Trimss wrote:^ you know I have nothing against you bro, having 5 people liking your shit doesn't mean you DON'T have to improve.

So staying on beat and having a better quality are the next steps for you bro. Keep up


Yea i know man, i been workin on tryin to improve, there's 4 songs i recorded for my tape that i deleted cuz i felt i could of done better on them

gotta hotel party next weekend with this chick that wants to rap on my tape so were gonna record some shit and i'm gonna try to improve myself for this track cuz i want to give her a song that her friends will be proud of her on, she been tryin to get on my tapes for awhile but we never got a chance to get together to work on anything.
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby iain08 » Jan 29th, '12, 00:09

Trimss wrote:
iain08 wrote:>talks about haters
>has no fans


Instead of talking shit like that, feed his writing. Eminem talks about killing people, does that mean he does it? No.

You're a dumbass. I've fed a lot of his work and I gave him real feed.
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Jan 29th, '12, 00:23

Atone man, just keep doing and improving. If you're doing it because you love it, then keep going. Nobody has the right to tell you no. :y: As long as you want to improve, you're set. Just do what you're doing. After all... we're from the internet. So don't even worry about it.
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Jan 29th, '12, 00:28

It's easy to bash someone until you're in that person's shoes. If you give feedback in a negative way that'd make him wanna quit, why even feed?
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby Trimss » Jan 29th, '12, 00:30

iain08 wrote:
Trimss wrote:
iain08 wrote:>talks about haters
>has no fans


Instead of talking shit like that, feed his writing. Eminem talks about killing people, does that mean he does it? No.

You're a dumbass. I've fed a lot of his work and I gave him real feed.


That doesn't change the fact that your post was useless, does it?
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Jan 29th, '12, 00:33

Menzo wrote:As far as I'm concerned, on the grand scheme of things, we're all wack. But we are here to help each other improve.


Exactly. Why is ego a big thing here, when compared to majority of the underground, we're horrible? Until someone here's buzzing, we can't pop shit at all.
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby iain08 » Jan 29th, '12, 04:20

Trimss wrote:That doesn't change the fact that your post was useless, does it?

Don't direct a useless post towards me and then call mine useless. Dafuk?
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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby B.A.D. » Jan 29th, '12, 12:19

again the same bullshit.

Atone, you are never going to improve that way, Its amazing how many times this has to be stressed. Stop concentrating on the un-worthy posts, is the only thing you do. People provide you with feedback and you only answer to the posts that threat you. You don give even give a single Thank you to people who try to help. Instead you bring the same shit up all the time about your fans and all that, and to be honest man, its really not hating, but I can not help but too quickly dissmis you as a 1. Compulsive Liar or 2. A Class Spammer. I see what you do, you have loads of accounts on social platforms, and you work around in inking it back to you, now, that is a good move, the only problem is that people arrive with illusion and leave with diss-appointment. Now, the reason people hate is exactly that, your attitude. so you don't really deserve any feedback at all if you are like that and keep doing what you do. Instead of focusing on improving the actual art, you concentrate on building up your ego.

and let me put it in a simple manner. It is impossible to believe someone will enjoy listening to your music, because of the simple fact that its terribly executed. you dont even rap to a beat man, which is what hip hop is built around. flowing to a beat, and you don't.... simple as that.

So people start feeding, but they end up hating not because of just being haters. But because of how you portray yourself to people who at start try to help.

so if you really want to improve, change you attitude and listen to what people tell you.

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Re: Atone The Underdog - Best Of Me

Postby CrashBand » Feb 19th, '12, 09:20

quite simple rhymes tbh.
i found this piece quite hard to flow, but you may have it sussed when actually rapping it.
other then that not too bad, not amazing either, keep at it and keep improving
I'm not tryin to be rude, but I sincerely wanna fuck the taste out of your mouth
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