Take Me Away (Track 5)

[Mr.DGAF]

Here's the fifth track from my 'A Group Of Writtens'. The second will be coming shortly, I hope. For now, hope this holds y'all over.



In a world full of millions, life becomes a huge question
And we're asking for the answers but it steady keeps you guessing
Who's next in a world where people die like it's nothing?
And we try acting tough, it's a lie we're just bluffing
Yet, inside we need something, just to make it all worth it
And we're urging other persons to perfect something imperfect
It is urgent that we change ourselves, or fade into the past
Recreate another laugh, see we hate to face the facts
That a problem's steady brewing, I got shit that needs sortin'
Tragic accidents are human, maybe heroes get aborted
So then tell me what's important when the world could break today?
I'm getting tired of this earth, somebody come and take me away

Come and take me away, we can fade in the night
Come and take me away, we can bathe in the light
Come and take me away, 'till the day I can say
That I've reached all my dreams, come on, take me away

What's another million dollars to a fucking millionaire?
See to me that's just a scholarship, I'd kill to get to there
Still it's fair, I don't need no pity from no fucking charity
I'd trade that million dollars just for someone who would care for me
I dare to dream that maybe soon I'll levitate above my life
Look down below a croud and know that hesitating isn't right
I'll go for mine and never let a mistake make me second guess
I'll never rest unless I get an answer to my every quest
I'm ever blessed to sever this, and start my life a better way
So fuck this shit, "take me away" is something I will NEVER say



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[Wallace]

I like the concept. Verses were kinda short, but I see how you tried and as a writer too I know how hard it is.
Overall lacks only longer verses.

[Mr.DGAF]

Thanks dude. Yeah, maintaining long verses is something I struggle with currently. I'm trying to work on changing that though. Thanks for peeping man.

[JamaicanPattlez]

Pretty good shit. Yeah, seems a bit short. Add another verse maybe? But I like what you have here, can't wait to see your next piece.

[Chilli]

Really dig the concept and message behind this. Love the "recreate the laughs/face the facts/fade into the past" section. Could imagine that sounding dope as fuck when flowed. You've got a whole heap of potential to become a really good story teller, I think. Some of these lines are extremely vivid and create an image in my head, which is what I think a lot of rappers trouble with, and it's particularly hard when reading instead of listening. The "I dare to dream that maybe soon I'll levitate above my life
Look down below a croud and know that hesitating isn't right" in particular.

Also, you never sacrifice content for rhyme which is something I really respect. Overall, dope. KEEP WRITIN'!

[Man1x]

Amazing track man, you've got a mind for concepts that has become very apparent. With these verses I can't see much flaw. Only thing I would say that needs a little bit of tinkering, like on the lad track I fed by you, wonder probably a little bit of rewording in some places but it really doesn't diminish the pieces quality and is good anyway. Amazing verse and amazing concept, can't wait to see you do with that concept you sent me homie.