Geno - Breaking Free

[JamaicanPattlez]

This is iiiilllll. Haha. You've definitely improved, because I could envision the entire verse as it goes, and it works. The beat compliments it, and the hook is great. Great job well done.

[JamaicanPattlez]

No doubt! Know what you should do... write a funny track, I don't think I've seen one from you lol.

[Chilli]

So dope. You slaughter that rhyme scheme in the first couple bars. You done any recording, braaah? I could imagining vibing to the flow of this like a muhfuck.

[Words]

*jawdrop* Good shit here, lyrics and flow were perfect. I could actually hear this in my head as I was reading it. One of the better verses I've seen on TR.

I feel like a lost soul, stuck up at the crossroad,
Is it God? No.. I paint my own Picasso,
But I'm gone so, toss the bottle of Adderall,
I just had 'em all, throw myself up at the padded wall,

Really liked the way you started with those first few lines, made the rest of the verse just fit so perfectly. Good shit Geno.

[Mr.DGAF]

I honestly don't even think I need to feed this, but I'm gonna do it anyway. This is one of the best verses I've seen from you. The rhyming is always on point, you master the scheme in the first two bars and then transition smoothly onto the next one. But the thing that really makes this something special is how well you express yourself. The verse sort of comes to life, lots of really nice imagery to paint a picture. The stomping on tears line is a good example, and it's also kind of funny to imagine.

You're a pretty talented writer, but I'm sure you probably get the gist of that from the feed. The next step is to really start recording, but I know you don't have a mic. Once you get one though, I really think you'll adapt quickly. Same with Menzo. Since you guys write to beats, it'll really help make the transition from written flow to recording flow much easier.

Anyways, good stuff dude, no surprise there.

[Kill You]

Great, I like your style of rhyming. It's dope.

[Enimee]

yo your sooooooooooo effin wack geno, like wtf are you still rhymin for gee?






sike nahhhh gotchu good u fucker llz


shit was skr8, i def was diggin all the multis and the first 3 bars were gold...hardshitasalways

[Eedee]

I oughta just be loud and vent, get it off my chest and scream,
Never time to pout instead, let it out and set it free,
But let it get the best of me? I guess I said I'd never see,
But lessons have been helpin' me to press myself and bless my speech,
So now I gotta wreck a beat? No problem, now I'm ready,
You'll probably want the best of seats to pocket my confetti.[/i]

Not gonna lie, this flow and rhymes you packed in there was awesome. Been lurking on your writings but never really told you how much I enjoy them.

I'm gonna read more and study your flow/rhyme schemes and hopefully it'll help me get better myself.

[Ka0t1c]

good rhyming, impressive but i wasn't feeling the chorus

[Atone]

i'm listening to Krizz Kaliko while reading this and i'm not sure if thats why this sounded good or maybe the simple reason is that you structured it really good

either way i like this,

i actually just read this 2 more times, and noticed more multies than i seen before, hard to gate on this, you did really good

[CrashBand]

Im new here but dope shit man, you've given me high standardsfor the creative writing section
you had me from the first 2 lines. the whole thing flowed flawlessly and great use multis.
loved the ground a bit/ sounds of it rhyme scheme, fuck it the whole thing was great haha