Eedee ft. Geno - Goodbye

[Eedee]

LoF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=143236 & viewtopic.php?f=24&t=143215
Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W5PFSjyg ... ure=relmfu

Eedee
Geno

Enjoy!


I'm falling for this girl that I dated twice,
She lifted me up, but I'm scared of heights.
Ain't it nice that I hate fading lights?
My defenses were up but I failed to fight.
Who's there tonight to come share my cries?
My fucking careless rhymes do dare defy.
Swallowing strife, as I fall on a knife,
With my dying breath it's best to call it a night.
I slap Casper twice, I'm a ghost in this shell,
There's no afterlife, but I'm roasting in Hell.
X-acto knives cut me when disaster strikes,
You can bet when I hear screams that laughter's nice.
All I'm hearing is an earful of screams
It ain't cheerful, it's infecting like a fearful disease...
What you're hearing is me, when I'm writhing in pain,
I'm just being insane, I'm done sleeping with flames.

[Chorus]
Good bye, my dear, thanks for the laughs,
You were always there, and I was banking on that.
In the hard times you were a shoulder to cry on,
Scuffles? We tussled, but let bygones be bygones.
But now you're gone, and I gotta push through,
I would but I can't, it's not something I could do.
Nothing left to say as tears drip from my eyes,
I love you with everything, but for now it's goodbye...

For days I've been sittin' in my basement just thinkin',
Of your face - how I miss it and the ways I would kiss it,
Hearts race when we did it, then the pacin' would pick up,
Is it crazy to say that it tasted delicious?...
Probably, I oughta be the stronger piece but honestly,
A part of me departed me and as far as being awfully weak,
You're partially a star to me which calls to me when all I see,
Is the dark and bleak, my heart just beats with yours in harmony,
I stop and think of how my spots of ink will maybe lead the way,
Pace and heave away to staple pages 'til I free the hate,
The pain I feel is real today, a fable's what the people say,
Is making it a feeble case, it's caging me - releasing rage,
So Stephanie, I write to you because you're all that's left of me,
It's meant to be, I'll never see the steps you seen in heaven gleam,
It's hell for me, I've ventured peace but severed my necessities,
I'm blessed to be your friend indeed, so baby please just rest in peace.

[Chorus]

I had a dream last night I was kissing my Jordan,
But reality stings me like a whistling hornet.
Missing my gorgeous, you're an angel to me,
If you take me back I'll remain faithful, and please,
Look past all my faults 'fore you launch the assaults,
Falling walls all around me as you're calling it off.
It's a hard drive thru the lane if you're installing at all,
Bitch, get with the program, your recalling is false.
So I wallow and sob, as I just swallow my thoughts,
And honest to God I forgot I promised it all,
I'm sorry I stopped but I'm feeling tarnished and soft,
It gets harder to talk as I fall onto a box,
I cough and I crawl off of it so I can open it,
I saw a little note on it, I'm awestruck when I notice this,
"I bought a gift for all your love, you're awesome, hope you know what's up,"
Shocked as I start glowing it's a locket with the both of us.

[Eedee]

Pretty good piece overall. Rhyming and flow was smooth from both, the concept isn't anything new but it never really gets old either, so it's all good.

Eedee, your opening lines were probably my favourite:

"I'm falling for this girl that I dated twice,
She lifted me up, but I'm scared of heights."

Shows the struggle of rough love. You're so into a girl and keep falling for her even though she puts you through a lot of shit - that's how I interpreted it. Not sure if the word "falling" was supposed to tie with the word play on the second line, but if so then

Your next two lines are also pretty good too, again, the word play is nice and I give a big props on avoiding saying something like, "Where's my wife" to go with the rhyme scheme - would've been stereotypical as fuck. Good stuff.

And the split final verse was very well executed, the flow transition was seamless and it's like the first line from Eedee ties in with the last line from Geno - basically how you both miss the fuck out of this ho.

Good effort overall boys.

Thanks for the feed, Menzo! Glad you enjoyed my parts; not sure how I would stack up with Geno on the same track to be honest.

And yes, all your assumptions are correct: yes, I'm extremely into her, the "falling" was intentional, and I miss the fuck outta this bitch. You intuitive little...

Thanks again, glad you likey.

[mdemaz]

Geno seems to be the aggressive rapper in this song, lol.
It's good to have someone with a calmish voice and then boom, you get a onslaught of brutal verbal attacks from the lyrics.

This seems to be your typical love song for hardcore hip-hop, all elements are there, many bars really go into a large amount of detail of the problems faced in a relationship and how it can change a man into something completely different.

It's really profound how you guys are pioneering a new style even though you have not even recorded it.
I know that love stuff is pretty common in rap these days, but this is a new way I've seen it expressed.

Well, at least I can only compare it to some of Em's work by a small amount.
I'm picking up a vast amount of metaphors and double meanings in many of the lyrics, well, basically throughout the entire song, each bar has some sort of meaning towards that song's structure and theme.

Anyway, good writing homies, hoping to read some more shit soon.

[mdemaz]

Yeah...
I think I mistyped something there, I meant you're aggressive...Well, I've never heard your voice, but I bet it's not as smooth as Eedee's..So I assumed it would be if you two ever did a joint...Lol...

[Eedee]

Thanks man. This is so slept on lol.

Seriously this.

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Damn geno, glad you bumped this! Awesome piece, I really liked the transition at the end you guys did that perfecly.
Eedee this is a really great verse man, It was deep and emotional and I like that a lot. Your rhymes were great and it flowed perfectly. I'll have to agree with Menzo, the first two lines by you were my favorite. Nothing i can really say that would help you, but great job!

Geno, props for bumping this man, its a great piece. Your verse was awesome, I dont think I have ever seen a verse from you that I didnt like! I loved your rhymes throughout this whole thing. You were on point with the multis and the inner-rhymes were great. I also might have caught a couple inverses in there: Feeble case -caging me, probably a lot more than that but I still have trouble recognizing them haha.
Anyway, Great piece you guys!

[J.R.]

Great multies and inner rhymes, great collab. Geno takes the case on multies, but Eedee on emotions!