On Fire

[SliK]

You got it wrong Mole, I ain't itchin' to beef!
Quit fishin' for me unless you wishin' for grief
Stick to the reef coz these waters they ain't safe
I oughta just spray paint this forum with race hate
You morons just take bait and respond in enraged states
I'd like it more if you laid waste to all who just waste space
it's important you make haste, this once great place
is a fuckin' disgrace, face the basics...

[SliK]

Just having some fun, haven't written in a while (and it shows )

I like the rhyming in your piece (obviously) and the shout out

It was obviously inspired by On Fire, the whole crazy random theme and great multis. I particularly liked
"Tellin’ midgets to always stand tall, visit the War Amps home
Within the hopes of liftin their poor damp souls
Askin’ for high fives (haha) don’t mean to go out on a limb
But...nevermind"
I liked the going out on a limb line a lot. Sometimes the rhymescheme was a bit hard to pick up on on first read. I had to go over it again looking for rhymes which helped the flow, but it just took come familiarizing with the content. It fit the beat pretty well, I love that beat

I've told you before you're one of my favorite writers on this board and that hasn't changed, keep dropping, I'm peeping them

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Great piece man, Some of the rhymes were hard to pick up on but once I read it over I could see where it rhymed and if it was on audio you could obviously make it rhyme just fine. awesome multis! keep up the good work man! looking forward to more stuuff from you!

[Emadyville]

that was def a fun read. seemed random but not actually random which i enjoyed. some shit made me leaugh which was good, i liked the flow, didnt pick up a lotta rhymes so idk if its just me or they're hidden or there arent many or whatever. but dope drop, loved the ending to man

[Emadyville]

yeah even still it doesnt really come off as all rhyming. doesnt matter, i enjoyed it!