best rymign eva

[MikeNUFC]

you obv were trolling

and the argument you werent... u didnt have LOF anyway

-Spyder

[Blu]

Hey homie, you look like a new writer Good to see you're passionate about writing rap But the rule on the forum is to provide feedback on someone else's piece before posting your own So if you go do that then edit it into this post, I'll leave it open But if you don't, I'm gonna have to lock it

Rhyming was average but not bad for starters Some stereotypical lines but we all start somewhere You should learn to use more multies And your structure is a bit weird and hard to flow to

Keep practicing though!

DEAD

[MikeNUFC]

thnks menzo. what does provde feedbck mean sorry

i try to use lots of multies bt ill tri to use more. iwnt to do mre nice emotinal conetent to thnks alot

[CrashBand]

A tip would be to try a new rhyme scheme so it's not just a simple verse

For instance after your main rhyme scheme you could do something like:

So I always keep going
That's why I keep flowing

[Mr.DGAF]

Fucking talk about a return to form . The imagery in this is incredible, the way you tell the story is beautiful. I was so wrapped up in the story I actually thought I was a dick that's pining. Tbh that piss with crying line was doperthan dope, I could taste that shit.

Also, everything that Menzo said.

[KingDavid]

HAHA I actually thought my dick was pining XD

[12characters]

Hey homie, you look like a new writer Good to see you're passionate about writing rap But the rule on the forum is to provide feedback on someone else's piece before posting your own So if you go do that then edit it into this post, I'll leave it open But if you don't, I'm gonna have to lock it

Rhyming was average but not bad for starters Some stereotypical lines but we all start somewhere You should learn to use more multies And your structure is a bit weird and hard to flow to

Keep practicing though!

lol @ the for being a new writer, probably my favorite part

[MikeNUFC]

thanks guys. wats a rhyme scehme? is that like wre da multies are? thanks

[BigBoss]

liek dis if u cri evrytim

[Mr.DGAF]

thanks guys. wats a rhyme scehme? is that like wre da multies are? thanks

Kinda, multies are basically how many letters you can fit in to each bar. And in rap standards, a bar counts as three lines in your rap. So let's say you said: "Many, many dogs love me". Then you could say: "They respectin' my aura". That right there is like an 18 letter multie, something most rappers can't do.


My advice is to write to a beat next time. You can put it on the same page as the dope rapz you posted. Just post the beat under your lines, like:

Many, many dogs love me
(Bum boom boom bum bum boom bam)
They respectin' my aura
(Bang bang bam bah-doom bum bah)


That's how you get that sick flow.

[Atone]

yo dawg your better than meeeeeeee

[CrashBand]

yo dawg your better than meeeeeeee

your raps are pretty similar though

edit: this has better multis

[Atone]

yo dawg your better than meeeeeeee

your raps are pretty similar though

edit: this has better multis

i know right, this guy is legendary