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american gangster ii.

Postby Blu » Apr 25th, '12, 03:22

Was listening to some 2Pac and just got some inspiration. Peep it.

Blu wrote:As I look in this mirror, I see a blank state
My end's getting nearer, I can see my dank fate
With my brain on drugs, I can rain on thugs right?
Nah, we thought that till they sprayed on Bugz*
I can hear the sirens in the distance, callin' my name
While I duck for cover with this glock, stallin' my fame
I need a homie but they're outta stock, cemetary's the same
We probably sold a couple hundred rocks, but who's to blame?


*Bugz is a completely fictional character that I created for the rhyme scheme. It has nothing to do with Bugz from D12.

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Re: american gangster ii.

Postby Mr.DGAF » Apr 25th, '12, 16:46

I got a rearview mirror, pac kinda vibe so you definitely hit it with your inspiration. The multies are pretty straight, some 2-3 stuff in there, you've definitely got the multies down. Its just wording everything to a point where it could get no better, because some of this is kinda iffy in how it flows as a piece. But yeah, good stuff, a bit short but good for some what it is. :y:
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

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