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Hands of Time

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Hands of Time

Postby RainMan44 » Apr 28th, '12, 10:44

LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=144596
Beat: http://www.shadowville.com/audio/Shadow ... 20Time.mp3


This is meant to be rapped in a soft spoken kind of tone, kind of like some of Kendrick Lamar's work..and the first 2 lines, I pronounce/deliver the words "stranded since birth/ landed on earth/ 'stand what it's worth" in the way he rapped the part "just like my drink, the fuck you think?" in "The Recipe"....that's the emphasis I put on those words.

This piece was a bit rushed, particularly the chorus...which doesn't really matter because I go over my songs tons of times before finalizing 'em...anyway, here it is.

(Verse 1 )

Stranded since birth, ever since I landed on Earth
Life? I couldn't ever quite understand what it's worth
Crazy as a baby, had the devil rock my cradle to sleep
Maybe that's why I got this dark side engraved in my genes
A slave to these streets, every single day I'm in deep
Shit, sleep with a 40 Cal to make sure I'll awake from my sleep
Nightmares got me wakin' in cold sweat with my sheets messy,
Dreams got me wishin' I grow to be King like E. Presley
God please help me, ........'cause I'm hurtin' inside
But I don't show it at all because I'm too concerned with my pride
My dear father struck with cancer, stage four of the lungs
But I know that he gon' make it, he's as tough as they come
My best friend physically here, but he's mentally gone
Depressed and won't answer my calls, God knows what he's on
Look, I don't mean to complain, but this whole scene is just strange
And the only fuckin' thought that be leavin' my brain......is


(Chorus)

If only I could turn back the hands of time,
I said, if only I could turn back the hands of time
If I could quit frontin': "You don't understand, I'm fine"
"Look, homie, you must not understand, I'm fine."
If only I could turn back, the hands of time
I just wanna turn back, the hands of time
The hands of time, the hands of time
I just wanna turn back the fuckin' hands of time
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Hands of Time

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Apr 28th, '12, 19:48

I liked this a lot man, really emotional. had Solid multis throughout the whole thing, Everything seemed to flow pretty well. Nice Job keep it up! looking forward to your next piece!
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Re: Hands of Time

Postby RainMan44 » Apr 28th, '12, 20:23

ShAdYTiLIDie wrote:I liked this a lot man, really emotional. had Solid multis throughout the whole thing, Everything seemed to flow pretty well. Nice Job keep it up! looking forward to your next piece!

Thanks for the feed brotha, appreciate it :y: if u got any pieces that need to be fed just link me :b:
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Hands of Time

Postby CrashBand » Apr 29th, '12, 13:57

Good piece. It really struck a chord with me. well written man.
I read it in Kendrick Lamars voice. Fuck this was dope though.

I liked the devil rocked my cradle line. I didnt really like the Elvis line, thought it was a bit cheesy and didnt really fit
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Re: Hands of Time

Postby Cupid Stunt » Apr 29th, '12, 20:33

Loved this. After reading this I wanted to write something similar, but I failed and it was really horrible. :P

Really good job man, keep goin'.
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Re: Hands of Time

Postby Mr.DGAF » May 1st, '12, 04:22

This is nice man. If you wanted a second verse you shoulda hit me up haha. But for real, this is something a lot of people relate to, and it was executed in a pretty creative way. The multies are nice, flow is really on point. But the subject and how its executed is what makes this so good. The multies and rhymes fit perfectly into the story, nothing felt forced.

Good stuff homie, like the drop.:y:
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Re: Hands of Time

Postby RainMan44 » May 11th, '12, 08:55

Thanks for the feed everyone :y:

haha @Crash I kinda liked that line just for the sake of the rhyme but yea compared to the rest of the verse it doesnt really mesh well lol
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Hands of Time

Postby ashley94 » May 11th, '12, 12:20

pretty cool
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