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I grew up straight with a crooked idol,
I'm the one you gonna face - say Crooked I's dull,
You just book it, spine crawls, when I took it, my ball,
Leave your social status smashed, just look at my wall,
I'm liable to fly by ya, hidin' smoke - blind fire,
Flamin' aimlessly? Pass the blind fold and I'll try it,
"I'm hella dope" is what I tell your folks,
When I'm lookin' for my dick sucked on suicide watch, give my head a blow,
"G I'm never low" is what she said to me instead of givin' remedies,
For my blue balls, I'ma never blow!
It's so pitiful when I spit a flow you forget I'm dope,
Then I picture you being bitter too, I bet you froze,
And I'm set ablaze, touch your face while I'm kickin' it,
Wanna get some fame? That's just crazy, ISN'T IT?!
Stop, take a breath, I'm a lock - call me Ness,
I'm headin' Earthbound straight from hell, probably blessed,
With electricity comin' outta my hands,
You forget when you're me that it's outta my plans,
To be an every day rapper, heavy, layin' backwards,
I'm chillin' in my room with my Chevy Chase hat turned,
My verse is a national lampoon,
Gettin' bigger ripple effects than when I'm splashin' in my damn pool,
Can't you, just accept the fact that I'm better?
That my track's more developed when I smack at your head an',
Then I laugh on your record as the adlib that's sped up,
Soundin' like a flash, blast past ya with ener-
Gy, no one better to just feast on your mental,
Decease all who enter with no peace sign to send 'em,
They're just pieced off an' rested, in the deep where I left 'em,
Where they bleed 'til it's finished as I keep on offendin',
Every member of the enemy teams that I see, we beef,
'Til I render every entity weak, cannot beat me!
I speak these verses when I hurt kids,
I just blurt shit 'til my turf sits on your nerves, bitch!
It's Ego Twenty-Twelve, the people wanted hell,
Our shit's more isolated than you dreaming in a cell,
While you scream and no one helps, so you crash and go black,
Harder than a racial sugar-high, after the fact.
THE FLOW
it flowed sooooo fucking smoothly, it was like a river just keep goin and goin and thats something that ive noticed a lot from you. even tho its text, ur pieces seem to flow well even for a first time reader. thats really dope. i also thought u came hard as fuck with the multies, which is nothing new, u got that locked. seems like you can rhyme multi syllables in ur sleep lol
my favorite part was
"Can't you, just accept the fact that I'm better?
That my track's more developed when I smack at your head an',
Then I laugh on your record as the adlib that's sped up,
Soundin' like a flash, blast past ya with ener-
Gy, no one better to just feast on your mental,
Decease all who enter with no peace sign to send 'em,
They're just pieced off an' rested, in the deep where I left 'em,
Where they bleed 'til it's finished as I keep on offendin',"
despite all the hate it gets, im a fan of bar splitting and i think you do that well.
and for some reason i read this with an obie trice voice in my head lol (kinda to the richard beat rofl)
"I speak these verses when I hurt kids,
I just blurt shit 'til my turf sits on your nerves, bitch!"
yo overall this was a nice piece that id like to see u expand on and turn into a song with a hook sometime down the line. good stuff mate
return the favor?
viewtopic.php?f=24&t=143797EDIT: can u expand on this line, i didnt really understand this
"I'm the one you gonna face - say Crooked I's dull,"
