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Right II Flow

Postby RainMan44 » May 11th, '12, 09:53

Beat: http://www.shadowville.com/122485/genre ... ect-moment
LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=145245

Verse 1

I lay facts on tracks/ On wax, I'm immaculate
I'm just a genius, when it comes to this rappin' shit
Come easy to me like a gangsta when he packin' clips
A pimp when he smacks a bitch, a playa who be mackin' chicks
I don't mean to brag, but shit
This is it, for you "big time" rappers who be yappin', spit
A wack line in my presence? I smack you blue and black
Spit in ya face and assume that your ass is new to rap
This is what I do, in fact
If I didn't have rap, I'd be in the streets addicted to that booze & crack
News flash, you trash, you dash...like Damon, when I approach
I play a higher role, the fuck gave y'all the right to flow?
I'm the West Coast savior, the best known player
On the team, I'm 2 - 4'in, I'm comin' for that ring
So the next time you open ya mouth to try and name rap's elite
Make sure you say my name or else I might just have to smash ya teeth

Chorus (x4)

Yo, who the fuck gave these wack cats the right to flow?
Nah, forreal man, really, I would like to know..
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Right II Flow

Postby Mr.DGAF » May 11th, '12, 21:34

This was really good dude. The multies are really nice and stick out a lot, which is definitely good. The rhymes flow really smoothly, the flow itself is quite nice. Not much to say haha, this was a cool verse. I don't know who told them could flow, but they lied hahaha.
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: Right II Flow

Postby J.R. » May 11th, '12, 21:38

Really dope. I love this piece. Multies stick out and it flows, I think you've really improved since we last collabed. Hell, I haven't rapped in so long lol.
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Re: Right II Flow

Postby RainMan44 » May 22nd, '12, 10:49

thanks for the feed everyone...and name, i appreciate that!

bro u were formerly C.R.E.A.M right?


btw new drop with zabe comin up right....NOW! :happy:
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Right II Flow

Postby JamaicanPattlez » May 30th, '12, 06:49

I enjoyed this man, yeah, you need to drop more! Even though I'm hypocritical and don't drop often myself anymore... :oops: But keep it up! The flow was pretty good, I had a little bit of trouble though at my first read. I'm impressed, not much else to say, everyone else covered it for me. Good job, and keep it up! :D
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