"Revolver" Freeverse

[JamaicanPattlez]

Whattup Name! Alright, well first off, I enjoyed this. I haven't seen verses from you in a while, so I think that also gives it a refresher to see you a post again, in my mind. Your flow's pretty good, I didn't have any issues with that. Could be me being picky, but one thing that kinda got me going "Wut?" would be this couplet:

"The gunshots are missed but a refill is chosen
Other rappers want me dead before I even spoken"

Didn't really register quickly in my mind, but as you said it's a messy and loose concept, so it's not a big deal haha. Dope regardless, I saw what you were doing there, and that's what matters. Keep up the good work!

[Mr.DGAF]

With this and your Anthem verse, I feel like the vocabulary is excellent. Again, the rhymes aren't spectacular, but you don't need ridiculous rhyming to drop a good piece. The subject matter picks up in the middle, like you said, it started kinda aimless and then moved into something a bit more focused. It's cool to see some people dropping again after The Anthem verse, hope you and JP stick around haha.

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Nice piece man I like it a lot, it was basically a freestyle verse so the topic doesnt matter too much. I liked the vocabulary and multis a lot, seems like you have been reading the dictionary! hah I wish I did more often, also very good use of imagery. keep it up man! nice piece