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Eloquence (aka RainMan44) and Zabe - Never Will Be

Postby RainMan44 » May 22nd, '12, 11:10

The concept of this song was "what would it be like if I was a wack rapper"....Zabe came up with it and we just ran with it. Enjoy. :y:



Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gRziQRD6ko4
RainMan44 LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=145439&p=1908150#p1908150
Zabe LOF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=145468&p=1907808#p1907808



(Verse - RainMan44)
Yo, I'm a wack cat- I sold my soul for mass appeal,
A nice crib, expensive car and a massive deal
I'm trash, but chill...they still buyin' my discs
Hoppin' on records, lyin' and shit, not even tryin' to spit
To my fullest capabilities, teenage chicks is feelin' me
And 12 year old boys under the impression I'm a real MC
I wake up in the morning and put on a fake act
Walk down to my studio, and proceed to lace tracks
Singin' off cue, talkin' 'bout my bling and my jewels
And all the nasty things that all of my women'll do
As for my fans? Every now and then I'll give 'em a new
Track, that'll tide them for a month, I got livin' to do!
Clubs to hit up, blunts to split up, bitches to fuck
Sums to get, son....Shiiiiiiet, I'm just livin' it up
Lyrical? WHAT? I'm a studio "gat clapper"
This is how it is, and this is how it feels, to be a wack rapper



[Chorus - RainMan44]
This the blueprint, if you wanna be a wack cat
Put out wack tracks and still manage to cop plat plaques
SYKE! Ya'll ain't on the same level as me
I'm DONE TALKIN' 'bout somethin' that I NEVER WILL BE



(Verse - Zabe)
I wonder if I fell into the trap of wackness
What would happen and would I fade into blackness?
Nowadays, rappers trade lyrics for chart positions
Being ill and rich at the same time is the hardest mission
Those Boi-1da snares don't work for the good guys
Only if you're Gucci Mane or Waka Fucker, they're "HOOD FLYYY!"
Any respect for MMG - Many Muscly Gays?
They all looking at me stupid with a frustrated gaze
Cuz they can't understand what the underground is
I'm not surprised that they haven't found this...
They won't get to the level that you're feeling this
They spend so much money to get two million hits
YMCMB? More like YMCA
I feel sorry for Drake, he shouldn't have got in their relay
Pause... can I add a meno before that?
Another wack punch, go get a memo from all rap
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Eloquence (aka RainMan44) and Zabe - Never Will Be

Postby Mr.DGAF » May 22nd, '12, 12:38

Psssh, if you were wack. I think I remember seeing this concept before, but I always thought it was a pretty cool idea. You both did a good job but I enjoyed Rains more. Both of you nailed the concept, and the hook was pretty cool too. Both flows were easy to get down on the first try, nothing too complex. I feel like Rains had more imagery which, for me, made it even better. Zabe's verse was very nice, and you definitely described being a wack rapper well. The only line I thought was kinda ehh was the MMG line. It was creative and all, but I think it was just really random. Unless that was your plan :shifty: . But I think Rain had just a little bit of a better verse on this. The rhymes flowed perfectly and the multies were pretty impressive, that goes for both of you.

Anyways, this was really cool and a nice concept which you both nailed. Good stuff fellas. :y:
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Re: Eloquence (aka RainMan44) and Zabe - Never Will Be

Postby SG. » May 22nd, '12, 21:16

Damn, Rain, you got me on this one. Good job, maybe we can do this again sometime.
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Re: Eloquence (aka RainMan44) and Zabe - Never Will Be

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » May 23rd, '12, 02:55

Awesome piece you guys, I liked it a lot! The concept was pretty cool and both of yall nailed it really well!! keep it up.
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Re: Eloquence (aka RainMan44) and Zabe - Never Will Be

Postby Eedee » May 25th, '12, 07:02

This was awesome. Rainman has a lot of multies, internal and at the end of bars. Nice punchlines. Solid verse, I enjoyed reading it over the beat. Good shit.

Zabe, this one was decent. I liked the rhyming, it was simple yet technical at the same, nice quick multies. Flow was great.

Really feeling both of you here. Nice collab.
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Re: Eloquence (aka RainMan44) and Zabe - Never Will Be

Postby J.R. » May 25th, '12, 22:28

I did this collab before, but you executed better. Superb flow by both and rhyming. I must say, you guys work well together. Form a group maybe?
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