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A Rude Awakening

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A Rude Awakening

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jun 5th, '12, 07:14

Structuring's weird, I know, but it flows to the beat. So any complaints on the structure, got it haha. :y:

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Beat:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6fXuEqHbb7w

As writers on this forum you don't dare to grow so make it stop
Now this pair of boys are acting paranoid at basic drops
I'm moving parallel, you taking shots will stunt your growth
But fuck it though it couldn't hurt cause Ego peaked eleven months ago
So Happy Birthday! Here's to hoping that you please retire
Now we've got to feed the fire, plus we got the decent Ego writer
Beefing, while I keep it silent, leaving you to seeth and pout
I see it now like, "Geno, pal, we should drop a piece about
How these old clowns are tryna teach us how to be a team, we'll spout
These feeble rounds and they'll leave town because the only choice is quit"
Then buddy Geno comes to plead "Oh, maybe we add Royce and Em?"
I'm sitting thinking, "Boy these kids don't get it", now my mission's known
To kick this flow with little limit's shown to my artistic growth
Which gets me so confused because your birthday piece they said was great's
The best display of something you wrote yesterday that resonates
The fact that you have failed to make a song that's not identical
To every piece you did before, it's getting kind of typical to witness you
Continue to drop shit that's only lyrical without the need for something new
But trust me dude, it's up to you to come pursue another group
Cause trust that we wont run from you, and I'm not even mad that you made tracks at me
That was dastardly, and now you face the rabid half of the catstrophe
And actually to rattle me you'll have to step your game up
But to expect that in a night you'll do what never happened in a year would be insane, yup
I'm coming for your game, shut the fuck up with that plain stuff
Adjust or just complain but my message must remain, once
We come up, we'll just stay up, you're Ego must create this act
Like you were made to rap and couldn't yet escape the fact
That I'm amazing at this, I won't quit until your group is paying me
Respect like it's a major fee, but I know you must hate to see
Another do creatively what your group can't, you may just sleep on this but here's a Rude Awakening.
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: A Rude Awakening

Postby Eedee » Jun 5th, '12, 09:41

You know how I feel about this. Check the link for my half of this round, man.

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