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Eedee - [1] Threshold

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Eedee - [1] Threshold

Postby Eedee » Jul 19th, '12, 03:23

LoF: viewtopic.php?f=24&t=146800

Beat: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IdZ84y1CyrA

*The first track from my written mixtape. This is just a little intro freestyle thing. Enjoy! :y:

[Intro] (:34)
Welcome through the threshold, you're walking down a path,
Entering my mind is like sniffing up a pound of crack.
It's fucking craaaazy, enter at your own risk,
But the first word'll perk you up like some grown tits.
Welcome to THIS home, and this ain't pushed back,
Even though both of our shit is probably good rap.
I want you to know, now since you've crossed the threshold,
Your support will allow me to blossom tenfold.


[Verse] (1:00)
I'm sick so your past wretchings keep your ass bent up,
Running this marathon, I'ma catch 'em all like Ash Ketchum.
Damn, Beckham, you're still bent, on a mission to kill vents,
Bitches who blow hot air out are dead, thinking I'll still get
You fuckin' with me? Hope you care to wear your derriere
Cuz if you dare to stare, it'll happen punk, it's barely fair.
I know just what you're thinking this very moment, starry eyed,
You caught a guy with awesome rhymes who doesn't mind to start a fight.
That's part of why the dark subsides, my heart is pride and karma cries,
The truth doesn't want you at all, that's why you foster lies.
My mind in overdrive is busier than Times Square,
You hear me and start to sweat like you woke up from a nightmare!
My shit is so hard-hitting the bowl gets an indentation,
My rhymes are so foul-play your soul gets an infestation!
It's like I practice wizardry, made-up words for incantations,
Blim-blike-zye-quakkitz, oh fucking hell, I just can't take it!
Purgin' the hurt with this verse? Man, that shit's cathartic,
If you ain't "Down" with that, you don't have to be this retarded!
Taking a bite of your music is like chewing gristle,
I blew the whistle but it's now time to shoot you with missiles.
I'm on some Cuban shit, like a fucking cigar Mark,
I bought Mel Gibson, I own the Mavericks with a bizarre heart.
I hope the car starts, because I'm off to race,
Welcome through the threshold, you've entered a lofty place.
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Re: Eedee - [1] Threshold

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jul 19th, '12, 15:44

Nice piece man. I like reading freestyle verses like this. awesome rhyming although I have seen better from you.

I read this to a beat I was listening to already and it flowed very well! nice job dude this should be a cool written mixtape!
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Re: Eedee - [1] Threshold

Postby Sam. » Jul 19th, '12, 22:12

Nice Rhymes, sloopy flow. I've nothing more to say.
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