Chokin' A Dyke (Fiasco Emulation 1)

[Eedee]

That was pretty cool. One of the better ones today, IMO. I liked the first two lines the best.

Onto the next day.

[PAINKILLƎR]

Nice, very vivid. I like the beginning the most

[EvryOnesACrtc]

THIS is what I'm talking about, man! Just post your stuff without over-thinking things and it'll turn out great. You went in on this, and it's the best 'Emulation' post I've read out of all of 'em. It stuck to a subject and didn't sound forced and/or all over the place like some of the other ones I've read. I was gonna post my favorite lines, but pretty much the first 8 lines were perfect. The last 4 is where you started slipping and getting off topic, but whatever it's a difficult verse to emulate rhyme-for-rhyme.

Awesome stuff now off to work on our collab.

[RainMan44]

This was dope, and I loved the improvement you made from the first one.

I like the whole "defiant" nature in the content, it comes off nicely. Flow was a bit hard to catch without a beat, BUT I later caught on....I think. Lyricism is nice, and what I liked is you had some rhymes crammed in there other than the obvious



"I have twelve razors, raising hell like the manger
Had the devil, a terrible rapping man
Sticking two knives through a slut's fingers, I'll slice her hands"

I like that. The whole drop was dope, from the content, edginess all the way to the lyricism. Good shit pal.

[RainMan44]

Thanks man.

Man, I thought this was fucking average, thanks to everyone again.

Np, was that rhyme I caught intended?