by EvryOnesACrtc » Oct 6th, '12, 20:08
^lmao I think you're getting the revised version confused with the original.
Anyway, this was nicee. You did a great job at rhyming each and every word. It was very similar to mine in that respect. It was completely different subject matter though. Overall, it was like a better version of the original--a new age version of it if you will. On to the next one!