Combustion Back 16

[J.R.]

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Battle me please,
I'll munch you down from apple to seed
Lunch is now, get your dick under the table, start fappin please,
Yum! And when you have the cheese, feed it to lil ol' rappin me.
Ha sissys, you need to relax cause I won't loosen up,
Lick the D, then stick it up your ass, your fucked.
Suck it up, quit your bitching and leave, okay?
I'm quitting, it's fitting, I really ain't got nothing to say,
Hey, I mean, Im spittin a sixteen about destroying you,
Seen? Broke? I ain't employing you, hope? I'm foiling you,
Boiling you, burning you to a crisp,
Toyin you, linchin you with the whip
Flip the rhymes at the end, like "Quick Magic,"
Shit, killed you so hard, you dead while I rapped it
Lick.. My ass, is what you can do, I'm
Back with destruction,
Shit comin out your mouth cause you flame so hard your ass is combusting

[Eedee]

You started out nicely with multis but then fell off after the "rappin' me" line... I see no beat to this, but I got the flow luckily.

It's okay for what it is - a quick verse. But you can do better.

[CanadaPure]

I'm having a hard time figuring out the flow to it, but overall it's not too bad. I agree with Eedee, I felt it started much stronger than it finished.