The Vigilanti

[Atone]

I havn't slept in 2 days, last time i woke up was 11 A.M on Thursday, i've been in writing mode, and trying to update my music collection (i'm very O.C.D about my music collection) anyways, i started typing random lyrics on facebook with no intention to even post i was kinda just rambling a story and it formed into me writing this full on Vigilanti verse

(Verse)
his history is a list of unsolved mystery's of blistoring screams/
of innocent teen's, he did this as if they were kids in his dream's/
as if this was a horror movie and he's livin thru scenes/
My Mentality lost no reality, i casually walk thinkin he has to be stopped/
it's tragic just watch as he magically talks sally to hop in the caddi and rock/
teeny bop music he uses to confuse his victim's to get em to listen
he's drivin to slip em a pill/ sit em so still so he can go in for the kill/
that's when i grab em from the wheel, drag em up the hill, stab em and feel so happy but still/
it's bad that i acted so shrill i have to just chill/
call the cops and tell em what? this fella's cut, his face looks hella fucked?/
or should i throw em in the basement and keep the cella door shut?/
I'm a militant vigilanti the eqivilant of batman the anti-
villin, a man with a mission wishin to put criminals into submission
my position is livin to rid the unforgivin

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[EvryOnesACrtc]

Dangg, I LIKED this a lot. I could tell it was kinda key-styled all throughout. It doesn't even look like you were trying all that hard but, altogether, came out real smooth sounding. It was kind of like a swagged-out version of a sick serial killer-type song. A lot of people on this forum have been doing this topic to death, but this was from a new perspective and style. Made it fresh. Good work, man.

I think with this line, which bothered me a bit, you should've said "keep the door of the cella shut":

call the cops and tell em what? this fella's cut, his face looks hella fucked?/
or should i throw em in the basement and keep the cella door shut?/

It would've made the multi better. I think you should go back and work on this a bit more. Put more thought into it and re-post it. It doesn't have that finished product feeling to it just yet. Anyway, keep posting! You get better with every drop.

[Fa-Q]

I like how you casually use multis throughout, instead of how some force multis. Bravo, I like this

[tadpole25]

great multis and great imagery, many people can't do both at the same time.

[Unlyricallyrics]

I might be stupid or smth but the multis sound somewhat forced in my opinion.
Xpecially this part

"he's drivin to slip em a pill/ sit em so still so he can go in for the kill/
that's when i grab em from the wheel, drag em up the hill, stab em and feel so happy but still/
it's bad that i acted so shrill i have to just chill/ "

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Damn atone you have improved a lot since I've last been on here nice job on the multis keep it up!

[Sam.]

Multis aren't complex at all. You usually have different subject matter, this one is no exception.