Hope To Find

[Atone]

to those that read the topic i made about me not posting as much, and even leaving for a bit due to family issues, this is basically my return piece that will tell the entire story.

(Verse)
29th of september, i'll never forget it
a time i remember forever so vivid
surreal when dad's cryin, i'm tellin sis things will be ok
i'm feelin so bad dyin, what hell is this? i dream to see a day
i wake up feelin better, no more rain we want sunshine
one shake up, we heal together, no more pain on my mind
but right now peace is so hard to find
it's like this anger and hate has left me so blind
i gotta escape it, move on and leave it behind
we can do this, i look to the sky and pray
see us thru this, i close my eye's and say
time to be ruthless, i won't just die on this day
sure it left us heart broken and devistated
but i can hear your voice in my head sayin we will never make it
with you gone, so now i'm feelin motivated
to show i can grow and take it
and we won't let her action's break us apart
she can run away from all her problems but i refuse to let us fall in the dark

(Chorus)
It's just one of those times
when in darkness, you gotta look for sunshine
can't let the rain kill your grind
you gotta keep goin, you got hope to find

(Verse)
Mom you wanna run off? cool, but i've heard enough of the excuses
nothin you can say could justify a reason for you to do this
and you dare call us up? and act like we should be able to act like nothin's wrong?
like you leavin was perfectly fine? and we're supposed to be ok with you bein gone?
callin up to wish a happy halloween? and not expect us to be angry?
and cuz olivia refuses to talk, you wanna go and blame me?
and say i'm the reason she's mad at you?
bitch you must me sniffin on a whole tube of glue
actin like it's our fault for everything you do
and your with him now, and it's sad
how you chose him over us and dad
cuz everytime you call us we can hear him in the back
you need his permission to talk, what kind of shit is that?
it's whatever tho, cuz with you gone things got better
i got 2 jobs now, and dad got his shit together
gettin outta the debt that you caused, see how that works?
you leave, and we clean up all your dirt
you were just a boulder weighin us down
fuck you bitch, without you were better off now

(Chorus)

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[J.R.]

First off you told me what you were going through so props for writing an emotional piece.

Secondly, it was pretty good. I liked it. The feels man. Haha

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

Pretty good this was an emotional piece the rhyming was there it just didn't add up like of your doing a 3 syllable rhyme and the second syllable is same then in the next line make the second syllable game you know what I mean? I explained it grappy but it will flow much better f you do that, although I understand rhyming and flow weren't the priority in this . Nice job keep it up