SajN wrote:Amadeo wrote:_Hawk_ wrote:On RR the rhyming isn't obviously lazy, and the lack of multis is not a noticeable feature for, as I said, the pace of the track carries the bars.
Certain parts are very obvious. You don't need a lyric sheet/highlighter to be able to tell that Rabbit Run is average/lazy in parts. You just need an ear.
There's far too much cheating in the song where he re-uses words in rhyme schemes:
Ball of shit/...sick of staring at this wall and shit, sick of all this shit, can't call it shit
Until it filters up/I can feel it building up, blow this building up...filled it up.
Scribble it out/...I'm fizzling out, thought I figured it out/...scared to dribble it out.
Half past 3/half-assed piece
Finally see/blind to see
Feel my rush/feel my nuts
Hair sit up/yeah sit up
Jaws was coming/law was coming
Sometimes I don't always find a word to rhyme to express how I'm really feeling at that time, yeah sometimes sometimes sometimes
Misaligned multis:
stuck in a slump/fuck, I'm stumped
boiling point/oil in your joints
win this race/shit in your face
When it's the greatest rap lyricist ever writing stuff like that, it sticks out like a sore thumb. He was in a mindset where he cared more about the presentation of the lyrics (ie the boring beat-humping flow where he mirrors the building kick drums at the start like in When The Music Stops) rather than the lyrics themselves. Style over substance.
And I did enjoy Eminem's delivery on Rabbit Run, although his flow was pretty basic. I wouldn't turn the song off if it ever came on.
Lose Yourself is also little lazy written a few places. I'll show you some examples when I get home, but I am sure you can see them yourself.
Given the complexity of the rhyme schemes of the song as a whole, it was not 'lazy (lazily) written' at all, anywhere. That's kind of like saying the moon landing was lazily planned. I'm interested to see your alleged examples, though.