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Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

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Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

Postby Spyder » Mar 13th, '13, 06:35

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Just Silver
I’m coughing damn weed harsh as Sam’s Feed
Get on your damn knees or kick it like stampedes
This bitch is sicknin syphilis disease picture this please
There is no need for the three feet weaves now
Crayola brows, cotton ball blouse with calls from Skout
A day over the house now I know what hoes are all about
Skipping and ditching licking and bitching end up missing
Trends of sipping and stripping rear end semen dripping
Club hopping drug popping cause of the head dropping
As an infant her chin has got permanent imprints
And the germs insist from sperm and jizz got to work with it
Herpes don’t leave burning to pee woe is me
At least her colons clean so now no ovaries
No ones as cold as teens in which I scheme hopefully
Full of dreams potpourri and good lawyers go to me
So I can do this socially and mark it up like old degrees

hook
Not a pill I aint swallowed, straight out the bottle
Grab a can and sniff the paint ‘til its hollow.
My brain may be fading but when it comes to tomorrow
We can look back and say… I’ve done it

Spyder
I’m a workin trance, verbal nerd words enhance
Pull up my Urkel pants do my little circle dance,
Perverted man sherbet color shirt and vans
Pills, purple plants and squirt Jergen hands.
Know what's more sick... I got orange foreskin
Gory and morbid sure shits like a short clit,
You can watch porn clips of how my sword dips
Cause its that or a horse dick... Your pick.
Magic mushrooms acid, bug fumes
Crack, laughing gas ‘til my bloods blue.
Vats in the back of gaseous tub glue,
Pill dump I fill up sniff bumps and my lungs through.
Toke hash so bad smoke gives me throat rash
My ass choke, hack while puttin my trip to this notepad.
If I could go back, no id still take the same stance you see
That ok? Microphone... how come you never answer me?!

hook
Not a pill I aint swallowed, straight out the bottle
Grab a can and sniff the paint ‘til its hollow.
My brain may be fading but when it comes to tomorrow
We can look back and say… I’ve done it
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Re: Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

Postby Just Silver » Mar 13th, '13, 14:37

hell ya looks mint i like the graphic as well
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Re: Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

Postby Just Silver » Mar 15th, '13, 19:30

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Re: Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Mar 15th, '13, 21:10

lol this was really dope, you guys both brought it. Great rhyming from both of you, and it flowed well. Hook kicked ass too. Also dug the concept. Great drop Sinister Syndicate.
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Re: Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

Postby Just Silver » Mar 15th, '13, 21:27

Thanks for the feed guy
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Re: Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

Postby Chet Starr » Mar 18th, '13, 23:22

I’m a workin trance, verbal nerd words enhance
Pull up my Urkel pants do my little circle dance,
Perverted man sherbet color shirt and vans
Pills, purple plants and squirt Jergen hands.


I’m coughing damn weed harsh as Sam’s Feed
Get on your damn knees or kick it like stampedes
This bitch is sicknin syphilis disease picture this please


Amazing rhymes from both of you gentlemen, bravo! Yet the verses and the hook really didn't fit at all together. It seems like two verses just stuck together with a hook added for good touch. Although Spyder did at least mention multiple drugs, so it did go along with the concept.

So it's a good work, nice show off of both of you guy's skills. Just nothing to write home to mother about, just a good fun piece
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Re: Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

Postby Just Silver » Mar 19th, '13, 00:18

Chet Starr wrote:
I’m a workin trance, verbal nerd words enhance
Pull up my Urkel pants do my little circle dance,
Perverted man sherbet color shirt and vans
Pills, purple plants and squirt Jergen hands.


I’m coughing damn weed harsh as Sam’s Feed
Get on your damn knees or kick it like stampedes
This bitch is sicknin syphilis disease picture this please


Amazing rhymes from both of you gentlemen, bravo! Yet the verses and the hook really didn't fit at all together. It seems like two verses just stuck together with a hook added for good touch. Although Spyder did at least mention multiple drugs, so it did go along with the concept.

So it's a good work, nice show off of both of you guy's skills. Just nothing to write home to mother about, just a good fun piece


thanks guy and ya the concept was wishy-washy mine was more about whores while Spyders was more drug oriented but overall was supposed to be funny which i think worked
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Re: Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

Postby Spyder » Mar 19th, '13, 03:39

thanks for the feed Chet

yeah i got a little to much Relapse in one day, and created a piece meant to sound like some freak on drugs. sent the verse to Silver and thats what he got from it, and then i created the hook after, trying to solidify that the track was a drug trip lol

good lookin man
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Re: Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

Postby Sam. » Mar 26th, '13, 09:29

Shots fired? :o
[Rollefsen] - SajN retired, bitch got old, unlike Sams "ladies".
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Re: Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

Postby Just Silver » Mar 26th, '13, 13:19

lol was waitin for u to see this piece guy
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Re: Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

Postby Sam. » Mar 26th, '13, 19:24

What are you trying to prove?
[Rollefsen] - SajN retired, bitch got old, unlike Sams "ladies".
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Re: Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

Postby Just Silver » Mar 26th, '13, 19:29

nothing and that wasnt a shot its saying how your a tough judge
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Re: Sinister Syndicate - I've Done It

Postby Sam. » Mar 26th, '13, 19:36

:wub: A praise from some one.
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