The TakeOver (1 verse)

[Evil Twin]

Wrote this quickly earlier on today

LOF: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=155500&p=2144091#p2144091

Let me give you a sneak preview and information on my inspirations
And give you this week's review of this rap generation and how I've been so patient
This whole era of new rappers that are spitting, oh how I'd love to end it
Yeeeah Baby, this is Capital Punishment, with no PUN Intended
I'm about to make an impact before you very eyes, it's all so sudden
Searching for an opening act for my performances, let me call Joe Budden
When I get to the certain point of popularity
Don't take offense when I ask you not to stare at me
So relax a minute and then scream as the darkness appears
And witness the most hardest and harvest the most darkest artist in years
Let's blast the ignition, from then it's pedal to the medal
Fuck who's down below, I'ma level with the devil
I spit so hard and leave everything in the booth
All the kids love my songs because I bring them the truth
With me here, I'm excited for the whole genre of rap
And I won't stop until I am honoured a plaque

Feedback appreciated

[Evil Twin]

Your concept was cool but very hard to flow on that...I found some lines to long (I have the same problem)

Rhyming was alright, I liked it.

Thanks man. Yeah flow probably seems awkward because I didn't actually rhyme to a beat. I just scribbled down some stuff. But thanks for your input

[space_bone]

yeah,dig this part

Don't take offense when I ask you not to stare at me
So relax a minute and then scream as the darkness appears
And witness the most hardest and harvest the most darkest artist in years
Let's blast the ignition, from then it's pedal to the medal



n it flows to Cleanin out my Closet

[Evil Twin]

Thanks man

[Just Silver]

i liked it as bigray said its hard to flow without unique stops and lengthening syllable sounds

but otherwise pretty nice wouldnt put this as a first verse might wanna revise with a beat in mind

[Evil Twin]

Thanks bro