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An Average Day

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An Average Day

Postby Just Silver » Apr 12th, '13, 06:44

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dont mind the number of lines lol i like it :smoking:

As I wake up, sweat frozen ,slow motion
Reach for my glasses, so i can see my actions
No motives but to live no focus, shut up and smoke this
So potent, all the shit i cope with ,would make you so sick
Rents just paid by a thin thread, Electric bills been read and been red
Its been said i need a job, lay off the pot, ive got what ive got no jackpot
Meaning, i wasnt born with a Silver spoon, im Just Silver and how are you
Wish i had the rich parents ,but had singular poorness
What a bitch this is but at least wasnt an orphan
A mother no dad one brother its sad how hes half i laugh yet
Serious in fact in which that i rap, Stuck in that phase
Where my age doesnt match my path, no career in sight
21 years of life prison terms verbs of spite kicked to the curb
Like a quick turn,yet needs a quick turn for the greater good
Lets the bic burn on a set of woods get high? bet i should

All my life is yesterday i lost all hope when i lost my way
In the scope of things i just got hopes and dreams
Thats an Average Day.. An Average Day
(2) Hook

Did i forget to mention the deficit of attention
And all the other bullshit side effects im gettin
From my mothers old habits of cold crack bit
Smothered in coal ashes harder to watch than Faggots
Remember its before i was born drugs formed
And deformed me as a human being
Checks from Autism its how i live and breathe
You oughta listen to my story till the eulogy
Its just you and me my chapters are yours
The pain is so real im not just acting bored
I laugh of course to ease pain from my DNA
Cant talk regular ways mind is never free of space
Youd never understand and im losing the race
Cant believe in God or comprehend having some faith

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Re: An Average Day

Postby CanadaPure » Apr 12th, '13, 06:57

Damn, what a switchup in writing from the 1st verse to the 2nd verse. I liked the second verse more, the first verse was cool, but lost my attention a bit.
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Re: An Average Day

Postby Just Silver » Apr 12th, '13, 07:13

thanks for the feed and yea it noticed it too but in a weird way i like it
first piece ive done in a while so im exercising
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Re: An Average Day

Postby CanadaPure » Apr 12th, '13, 07:16

Yeah it was very differently written. I enjoyed reading.
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Re: An Average Day

Postby Francesco » Apr 12th, '13, 11:43

CanadaPure wrote:Damn, what a switchup in writing from the 1st verse to the 2nd verse. I liked the second verse more, the first verse was cool, but lost my attention a bit.


This...Good drop overall though! :y:
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Re: An Average Day

Postby Just Silver » Apr 12th, '13, 15:42

thanks for the Feed guy
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Re: An Average Day

Postby Just Silver » Apr 14th, '13, 16:44

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