Just Silver wrote:Pretty damn good sounded really natural word selection was nice and flow was good
Only part that was somewhat weird was how the third verse talks about your writing while the other two is more about gfs and friends
But overall makes me wanna write and that means something lol good shit guy
mdemaz wrote:dam
Geno wrote:Snake897 wrote:Oh my god. What the fuck. HOW DID YOU KEEP THE SAME RHYME SCHEME THE ENTIRE SONG? That shit is fucking beast. I have problems keeping the same rhyme scheme within a friggin verse. The multis are creative and hype as shit. Don't seem forced at all.
The one problem I have with this song is the abrupt subject matter change with the last verse. It is a fantastic verse, yeah, but it just doesn't fit in imo. Maybe instead of a verse addressing your audience and society, a verse about family member betrayal (if you have experienced such a thing, since, to me, such a thing is the worst betrayal ever) or maybe a verse about how to deal with betrayal and traitors.
I just explained in the last post that it's more about people in general and I'd much rather talk about what I did than making up a story that didn't happen lol.
I appreciate the feed though man.
Menzo wrote:This was nice man, the rhyme scheme was so hot.
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