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Controlled Substance (silver response)

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Controlled Substance (silver response)

Postby Just Silver » Aug 16th, '13, 23:21

feed-painkiller Control TR

Just a 10 min name drop goin with the trend good for cw :smoking:

Im just silver but im the closest to the gold i suppose
Starting at A for A-tone i keep buzzing like a dialed phone
Never could play the role of a pretend homo
CP thinks that shits cool Painkiller Bigray too
All knowing every slight gay joke has some truth
So when they choke in the booth wheres the pen
It depends , him and his friends only like Men so
they ride bigger dicks than Menzo and Genos Ego
Even though id give Geno Rob "Van" Dam kicks
And sliks cool so he can just leave with a bandage
But this crash band bitch can suck my damn dick
But he might enjoy it most users greasy like ointment
Wanna talk to sajn schedule appointment
Then killem and trade places for my own enjoyment
Then ill just joke and piss you off from unemployment
I also love how you faggots follow each other
One person likes somethin different you duck and cover
So everybody hovers with each other like lovers
I dont have a job but its not about your real life
Ive been real nice and all i did was join a website
Based type internet never showed it interest
Trolling like a monster under bridges where the fish rest
Bitches on TR that are male got the thickest breasts
End up in jail all over a piss test im so pissed
Nosey people like Trimss gets lit up like lightskin
You all lose while the hype wins a slight sin
So god made men while dinosaurs in the floor
Flintstone through his chest times about 94
I know theres more but the rest is a chore
Plus im bored and i tend to rush running a war
So some of you been warned all the others forewarn
Where they wear delvanni torn by my army of swords
I just need Spy on the chorus we can all move forward
We can roll with it how roll did it
We can move more writtens and have c dubs existence
Come around and witness a stupid competition
Fuck it i rushed it , i meant it so fuck this
Last edited by Just Silver on Aug 17th, '13, 02:34, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Controlled Substance

Postby Just Silver » Aug 16th, '13, 23:45

thanks guy :y: cw is finally back
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Re: Controlled Substance (silver response)

Postby Just Silver » Aug 17th, '13, 02:57

thanks guy and off and on yea 5 min then save thought more then loaded
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Re: Controlled Substance (silver response)

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Aug 17th, '13, 03:27

Oh shit, a lot of name dropping. You really went all out. Some really good rhyming, flow was alright. The struture was nice. Really like how you voice your feelings and views on certain things in your pieces, that's awesome. Anyway great drop some hardcore shit in there.
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Re: Controlled Substance (silver response)

Postby SliK » Aug 17th, '13, 03:35

It's funny how only the people who don't hate me say my name directly.

Good shit bruh.
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Re: Controlled Substance (silver response)

Postby Just Silver » Aug 17th, '13, 03:39

thanks guys appreciate it plus activity is up :y:
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Re: Controlled Substance (silver response)

Postby SajN » Aug 18th, '13, 02:04

Damn JS, you seemed really pissed in this, lol. It was good though.
Great content, some nice lines. I think the rhymes could've been slightly better, though, but maybe it's just me.
Good stuff anyway
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Re: Controlled Substance (silver response)

Postby Just Silver » Aug 18th, '13, 02:06

thanks guy and i know theres a couple things i wouldve changed but i think it came out decent :y:
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