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SajN - Ballin' UnCONTROLlably (names dropped)

Postby SajN » Aug 18th, '13, 02:08

First of all. I know that I barely post here, so it seems weird, but I really got the urge to respond to these "Control" stuff y'all have it going, so I did. Been a long time I wrote something. Some of this written while sober, and some of it while high.

The flow is a lil messy because I didn't write to a beat

LOF:

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Yo… I heard that… that

Derdy is sucking PK, PainKiller, you’re fucking dirty/dƎrdy
I don’t want no threeway, not at least ‘till I am 30
SHUT UP! You know how much you fucking hurt me?
Shit I hope your new found love gets fucking herpes

Rollefsen, there’s only place for one Norwegian in this forum
Do the members a favour and leave, or stay and bore ‘em
I won’t let you win over me and the take over this throne too
So if you ever try some bullshit, I’mma/Emma Stone you.

I am not Steve Irwin, I won’t fight the Big Ray
I am not trained well enough, and he is in a fit state
So… big mate, fighting against you? I don’t even plan to
But if you ever touch my Benz, I’mma fucking ban you

Just Silver, damn you, do you even know how it may look
you plus web search equals naked babies on Facebook
Hey dude, that is some really fucked up shit
I really wanna say more, but yo, enough of this

Cuz y’all see the main point is that I still go rough
Like a Don watching his soldiers grow up
Be bossin’ on my throne, while I am sipping Bacardi
Watching you all slowly becoming slaves of #TRilluminati
! Is He Nuts? No, He's InSajN !
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Re: SajN - Ballin' UnCONTROLlably (names dropped)

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Aug 18th, '13, 02:34

Damn SajN that motherfucking wordplay :worship:

Those last of of lines though whew powerful drop.
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Re: SajN - Ballin' UnCONTROLlably (names dropped)

Postby SajN » Aug 18th, '13, 03:22

Haha, thanks guys!
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Re: SajN - Ballin' UnCONTROLlably (names dropped)

Postby Raul » Aug 18th, '13, 03:23

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Amazing.
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Re: SajN - Ballin' UnCONTROLlably (names dropped)

Postby Trimss » Aug 18th, '13, 14:13

The punchlines were pretty funny, I really laughed at the Just Silver one. :laughing:

Like you said, I feel like the flow is a bit weird but it's probably because you didn't write to a beat. It looked more like a short poem than a rap if you know what I mean lol, it might be due to the structure.
But SajN's a poetic motherfucker so it's okay.

There's not much to say overall, it served its purpose and it was funny.
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Re: SajN - Ballin' UnCONTROLlably (names dropped)

Postby SajN » Aug 18th, '13, 14:34

Yo, thanks! :worship:




I hope people understood why I wrote
SajN wrote:So… big mate, fighting against you? I don’t even plan to
But if you ever touch my Benz, I’mma fucking ban you


and don't think it was something random. Bigray said in his Control piece that he'd crush my Benz. Just felt like explaining this line, lmao
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Re: SajN - Ballin' UnCONTROLlably (names dropped)

Postby SajN » Aug 18th, '13, 22:43

Hage wrote:I'm guessing that i'm the only one that doesn't get the silver line.

Just Silver has for the past two weeks several time stated on "Last One to Post Wins..." that when he sees picture of naked babies on Facebook, he reports them so they get removed. It created a little humour in that thread about JS looking at naked babies.

So yeah, that's why I wrote that line.

Thanks for the feed! :y:


And JS, I hope you know I am just fucking around. Nothing serious :flower:
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Re: SajN - Ballin' UnCONTROLlably (names dropped)

Postby Solace » Aug 19th, '13, 03:48

SajN wrote:I don’t want no threeway, not at least ‘till I am 30

Lmfao.

Nice stuff SajN. Title is clever.
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Re: SajN - Ballin' UnCONTROLlably (names dropped)

Postby Kill You » Aug 19th, '13, 08:35

Rollefsen wrote:Daaaayum mah bruva, I fucking loved this shit, hahhaha. I outta respond sometime soon... :shifty:

Cuz y’all see the main point is that I still go rough
Like a Don watching his soldiers grow up
Be bossin’ on my throne, while I am sipping Bacardi
Watching you all slowly becoming slaves of #TRilluminati


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"I guess this shit took an unexpected twist like the neck of the fricken Exorcist!"

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Re: SajN - Ballin' UnCONTROLlably (names dropped)

Postby Just Silver » Aug 19th, '13, 20:55

great structure clean and easy to read u should write more often

the best verse imo was about Big ray i lold at the benz ban line

and i only report babies with their shirt off lmao facebook removes the pic not my fault

good shit wish u didnt decline our collab :/
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Re: SajN - Ballin' UnCONTROLlably (names dropped)

Postby Francesco » Aug 21st, '13, 23:33

Nice one homie... I wish that was longer & more names were dropped. Definitely do a Part 2!
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