Letter Home

[Mr.DGAF]

What's up CW!?! I know it's been a while but I'm back with a piece or two while I'm stalemated at college. Until I can get back to my recording area, I'll post a couple verses from incomplete songs here or there. With that said, here's something I wrote today about starting college. Left some names out but put how they end so you know the flow I was going for.

Feed: http://forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=24&t=162898
Beat http://www.shadowville.com/beats/moods/soulful-beats/page/4 (Never Letting Go, the 2nd one)

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I took it all for granted, never really understood
What you did for me, until college happened
Now I’m emptily, sitting in a dorm room bare
It’s a war zone, thinking that of course you care
And I sure know even if I forced you there
You would forgo anything and storm right here
It’s a short road, but who would I be
I’m losing my mind, so screw if I need
This school in my life, I’m too unlike these
Kids boozing all night, so who should I be?
The kid you’ve grown and raised to date
Or someone I know you’d maybe hate
If that’s what it takes then I guess so be it
I’m happy to say I will never be the
Popular kid if popping some pills
Is popping I feel it’s impossible still I gotta fulfill
This option I’m dealing with or else I’ll prob-ly get killed
I know it’s soppy but still -- I miss you guys
I’d kill to find an option to still be with you guys
It’s all that I feel when I sit at night
The sorrow, it builds and I had to let it out
I’m sorry to feel like I’m sad it’s getting loud
I’d offer to chill but my dad is feeling proud
I’d never let him down (I’d never let him down)
Mom too, sending texts on the reg
Asks if I’m good and I said to her “yeah”
My fingers slipped as I’m pressing to send
She sees I’m feeling depressed and begins
To regret that she ever sent me to live
Away from her -- I feel it too
I’d say it first, but then I’d lose
Respect and I bet you’d still be cool
With me even though I know it kills you too
But this is something that has to be done to
Dad and _(at) and _(abby) and _(ant), and mom and _(eith) I’m glad that I love you

[Eedee]

First of all, I know the feels you're going through. Getting to college. Missing your family. I've been there. So this piece was really brought to life, and brought those feelings back for me. So thanks for that, asshole haha

Now for the piece. I like the title. Short and sweet but fits the whole thing perfectly. It's a letter home. And damn dude. That beat you chose really did the atmosphere for this song justice. You had some weird ass rhyme schemes at first, but I liked it. It was like some mismatched, tucked-under-each-other schemes. I didn't catch it at first until I went back and examined it. I liked that sort of shit. I'm reaching here but the schemes represent your emotions of being at college alone. You're jumbled and shit.

I didn't get the flow at first until I realized you're going for a faster flow, am I right? Because then I got it... I liked the word choice as well. Like here:

I know it’s soppy but still -- I miss you guys
I’d kill to find an option to still be with you guys

Instead of your usual multi here, you opt to use the same last two words for the scheme, which impacted more than a multi ever could. Shit, man. You must've been in the zone while writing this.

I love it. You better record this at some point. Or else.

[Mr.DGAF]

Thanks holmes.

[Francesco]

Damn... that was powerful. A lotta feelings & emotions in it... Very well done homie!

[Mr.DGAF]

Thanks man, definitely appreciate it!

[Just Silver]

I couldnt listen to the beat because of my device but still this had some good story telling transitions

the first lines when it didnt rhyme threw me off a little
the structure was thin so it was somewhat easy for a flow acapella

near the end it gets more emotional and the text line with your mother was nice and stood out

vocab wasnt really a focal point but nevertheless a great story piece

id like to see u do more abstract pieces with a story

good shizz

feed me as well if u can lol?

[Mr.DGAF]

I gotchu mane. And the rhyme for the first one is inside the bar haha. All for granted/college happened

But thanks dawg, I shall feed shortly.

[Eedee]

I gotchu mane. And the rhyme for the first one is inside the bar haha. All for granted/college happened

But thanks dawg, I shall feed shortly.

It's longer though.

I took it all for granted, never really understood
What you did for me, until college happened

[Mr.DGAF]

Oh shit lel. Unintentional. Or was it????


it was

[Eedee]

It's okay. You're still my friend. I just think lesser of you now.

[Mr.DGAF]

Nooooooo.

[Francesco]

Thanks man, definitely appreciate it!

Anytime homie... I enjoyed it.

[Ka0t1c]

i thought it was good for the direction, sometimes it seemed to lack the lyrics though, it wasn't deep as it could have been, also you used the word option twice which took away it's lyricism some. still a good drop!

[Eedee]

He recorded this, lol. I bumped it so hard today. Whew.

[Flamez]

I liked it had emotion to it, and I know what it's like. Good stuff.