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True Story

Postby Flamez » Sep 30th, '13, 04:52

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I’m in love with this nerdy girl at my school
should I ask her out? I just need to act cool
can’t be stupid and make a fool out of myself
but I’m scared what should I do? just be yourself
is what I hear my friend’s tell me to do, but shit
my balls shrink, I hit a wall and throw a fuckin’ fit
I have no game I can’t commit to this, I’m a shy guy
a guy without a job who’s nervous I ain’t gon’ lie
I need to try and impress to get her to like me
I tend to overdo shit and end up being a nobody
I start looking at my body I need to lose some weight
I need to motivate myself and bust open this gate
need to eliminate some fat so I start eating healthy foods
I got more confidence and noticed changes in my attitude
I cut back on junk food ate more fruit and veggies too
you know life’s good in two months down forty pounds less
no longer feeling insecure I feel blessed I’m tasting success
next day, I see her out on the town so I finally ask the girl out right?
well she said no, but it’s alright I’m cool I’ll just go home and write…

haha
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Re: True Story

Postby SoldierShady » Sep 30th, '13, 12:35

Step up ya multis game breh. :coffee:
"So one last time, I'm back, 'fore it fades into black and it's all over, behold the final chapter in the saga, trying to recapture that lightning trapped in a bottle twice, the magic that started it all...tragic portrait of an artist tortured....trapped in his own drawings..." - Bruce.

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Re: True Story

Postby Just Silver » Oct 1st, '13, 23:50

not always about multis though flow i think is more important overall
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Re: True Story

Postby Broken Beats » Oct 4th, '13, 02:12

luv u hollywood :)
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Re: True Story

Postby Francesco » Oct 9th, '13, 00:01

Yeah rhyming is kinda simple but it's good overall... keep it up homie! :y:
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Re: True Story

Postby ilovebender.com » Oct 12th, '13, 14:37

Awww, sicc flow
I'm from South London from Westminster to the back streets of Thornton Heath.
Off Brigstock Road.

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Re: True Story

Postby Flamez » Oct 12th, '13, 17:37

Thanks guys.
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Re: True Story

Postby SpiderDiaze » Oct 13th, '13, 16:23

Nice rhymes flames bro!
TRShady's neighbourhood Spiderman!

Spiderman, Spiderman,
Does whatever a spider can.
Spins a web, any size.
Catches thieves- just like flies.
Look out! Here comes the Spiderman.


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Re: True Story

Postby JamaicanPattlez » Oct 13th, '13, 18:06

SoldierShady wrote:Step up ya multis game breh. :coffee:


Agree with this. Rhymes are simple, but the flow and content is great. So, I won't criticize you for it cause you're probably new at this. Keep at it, and great job. :y:
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Re: True Story

Postby FAME » Oct 15th, '13, 07:03

Agree with the others that the rhymes are simple, but the content is good. I liked it, had personality to it.

If this girl doesn't want you, another one will (:
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