EastCoast

[Just Silver]

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From the east coast smokin dope eating lobster meat
Sticking opposition in the ground like soccer cleats
I got the heat when my location stands up say mass stand up
Funny like some stand-up through stanzas
How the illustrations get depicted
Pictured barely getting by struggle by living
8 sections I've been given this direction ill snap in a second
Spitting with infectious style spittle on the dresser
Im too wise for the clever so not even a Fox could benefit
Thinking outside the box they're not literate
Sinister syndicate coming after the middle men
Punish you faster than cars under the Lyndons bridge
And have your organs like accordions
Smashing your accord doors in
Fatality announcement I enter the room
You meet your tomb I'm the raider for the rarest of loot
Looking rare in your wounds like steak tips face it
Face off with me your face is in awe n amazement
Spacing out drug interactions mixing liquor with pills to get
Back again feeling extravagant extra special has been
Coming with ingredients to get baked on a mattress
Expedia highness however I get by it
Living day to day just see my R.I.p
Lazer gate darkness in my mind when I seek
Suicidal do or die mentality while the knives at reach
Slide by just barely like baseball dashes
I gotta have something to care for before I meet engraved statues
Im here for now I mean I gotta look past it
Opportunities are slim and I've never got my masters
Here I am as a man on the eastern coast
Just need a key load of coke type of bread loaf
Im off the head so.. just have a nice day
Im motherfuckin done I think it's time for a break..
..like breakdancers cardboard stereo radios
Glance harder at my material it's genuinely spiritual
Genuine as the purest Heroin Mexican friendships
Your in a rude awakening when ill be shaking the building
Never will end these whirl winds ah fuck
This is when my verse ends

[DetroitSkills]

dope

[Just Silver]

Thanks guy

[shadyblogger]

I liked this one. Definitely some really cool moments but there were some parts that just felt like your plain old style, not that that's bad, just that it could have been more consistent and even better I believe. Keep experimenting brah.

[Just Silver]

Thanks broski

[Just Silver]

Bumpp

[user115]

its great man! nice work

[Just Silver]

Thanks guy

[Just Silver]

Last bump new project

[RadishRun]

From the east coast smokin dope eating lobster meat
Sticking opposition in the ground like soccer cleats

And have your organs like accordions
Smashing your accord doors in

Liked these lines a lot man, I woulda changed the last to
Lock all four doors and smash the accord you're in

But that's just my 2 cents. Hard to tell flow through text

[Just Silver]

Thanks guy I appreciate the feed immensely

Itd be nice to look at some of your new writing if u do

[ilovebender.com]

From the EastCost I got 'The North East' and your opening line with lobsters, to me, suggests Maine? IDK...
Everything else like soccer seats reminded me of soccer moms and the suburbs and... The American Dream gone wrong. Like all the negativity and reality of day to day life and stuff.

[Just Silver]

Wasn't meant to have a pure message but your right about the negative part

Thanks guy for the feed

[Just Silver]

Bump

[shadyblogger]

Lol