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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Just Silver » Feb 23rd, '14, 04:03

Thanks guy I gotta be more active on cw
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Just Silver » Mar 4th, '14, 02:52

Final bump
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby monobloss » Mar 4th, '14, 20:12

Damn dat beat is bad
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby CanadaPure » Mar 4th, '14, 20:53

monobloss wrote:Damn dat beat is bad


100% agree. :laughing:
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Just Silver » Mar 5th, '14, 19:45

As in good?
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby CanadaPure » Mar 6th, '14, 03:03

As in shitty
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Just Silver » Mar 6th, '14, 03:04

Oh I see lol ya danny brown beats are different
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby shadyblogger » Mar 6th, '14, 03:05

Last bump then new project
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Just Silver » Mar 6th, '14, 03:07

New project hasn't even been bumped yet. .. suck it figuratively
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby shadyblogger » Mar 6th, '14, 03:08

I just fed your piece Silver
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Just Silver » Mar 6th, '14, 03:19

Thanks guy
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby RadishRun » Mar 8th, '14, 18:05

I've only read some of your works, Silver, but in my opinion, this one is towards the bottom of the list. Seemed like you were forcing rhymes/punchlines like the Fischer Price/Hasbro lines. On the other hand I think your rhyme placement can be dope, I really liked the few beginning lines, wish you kept the scheme going longer. Lastly, was hard for me to keep a flow going in my head (even while listening to the beat) but honestly that's most likely because I'm bad at it.

EDIT Just listened to it over the actual (non instrumental) song and it made a lot more sense. Words and flow match up much better than I originally thought. Keep up the good work man.

However.. no matter how bad I may be, I always seem to notice CP's flow. This is probably kinda risky to say since we're currently in a battle tournament together, but damn man your flow and structure is fucking awesome. It's like I know exactly how you intended to rap the piece, which makes it so much more enjoyable. That airplane line was fire to me.. honestly the whole thing was. Good job man, wish you posted stuff more often.

Overall nice job guys.
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Just Silver » Mar 8th, '14, 18:10

thnx guy great feed

however no one seems to notice my verse mirrors danny browns on his song outerspace i even stole the flow and such lol it was just an experiment
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Just Silver » Mar 8th, '14, 21:28

Someone plz read danny browns lyrics on this beat lol
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Re: Just Silver (Feat. CanadaPure) - Outerspace

Postby Just Silver » Mar 17th, '14, 15:23

Just Silver wrote:Someone plz read danny browns lyrics on this beat lol
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