PAINKILLƎR wrote:Sorry for the wait spyder, I was busy in the morning and I was hoping I'd be able to do it on my computer when I got home but didn't get the chance to because I ran into some trouble so I said Rick it and did it on my phone, sorry for any grammatical or punctual errors guys Haha.
CanadaPure wrote:PAINKILLƎR wrote:Sorry for the wait spyder, I was busy in the morning and I was hoping I'd be able to do it on my computer when I got home but didn't get the chance to because I ran into some trouble so I said Rick it and did it on my phone, sorry for any grammatical or punctual errors guys Haha.
Pretty men.
Mr.DGAF wrote:Basically what Menzo and T-Rex said. This verse is great with the rhyming. The topic is played, yes, but it's important to focus on improving in one aspect first. And with the rhyming, you have definitely improved. The length of rhymes, their placement, how they craft the flow, it's all improving, and that's a great sign.
Mr.DGAF wrote:This is pretty good my man. The multies were seriously on point, like that was impressive how you used them in this. Didn't falter at all, the flow was solid, but like I said, the multies make this verse. Good stuff indeed bruh.
Also, we still need to get a collab in man, I remember it came up a while ago or something, I think, and we mos def need to do that soon.
Mr.DGAF wrote:It was okay. I liked a few lines, my favorite was "the ill in me" line. But the flow was a bit difficult to pick up on, and the rhyming wasn't really spectacular save for maybe a few lines.
Solid stuff though. Keep working at it, this is pretty good.
Spyder wrote:hage verse is fire
beyond anything ive seen
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