They're so hard

by **Just Silver** » Mar 27th, '14, 14:03

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Yea your so hard with the gangster persona
Saying you've got guns but afraid to hold them
Paid them vultures to do the work for you
I'm just gonna relax till you slip like oil
Gats illegally required with no tax where's the facts
I'm inspired but in reality And on wax there's nothin
Im straight fired up on the track but no guns im dumping
Young or something more like in the midst of it
So ridiculous it's freshman to next working man
And they don't know how to act so they pack the heaters
Can barely speak English to their fire I'm the extinguisher
I got fists nonfiction that'll fraction a rational crew
I'd never let the bullets fly at you
Your butterfly food nectar sweet best believe
If you got a gat its a tech with bbs
If it's a real gun then fuck it they're some savages
I ain't messing with them till they go to jail
I ain't tattling or throwing bail they should have known themselves
I'd rather smoke an ounce in a parking lot area
Thinking life is always good yet its much scarier
Especially if relentless goons are trying to bury ya
I think I'm about to just bury myself give them some help
As they toss a fake plastic gun case on a shelf
I'm gassed like shell smoking diesel out Ls
Hells open for these fraudulent young males
I'm about to high tail it life's complicated without jail
No real job so maybe I should do a robbery
Are these people an enemy or a deep twisted part of me

by **shadyblogger** » Mar 28th, '14, 00:15

Nice little verse. I enjoyed the closing lines too. Good stuff

by **Just Silver** » Mar 28th, '14, 00:19

Thanks guys :y:

by **Just Silver** » Mar 28th, '14, 18:50

Bumper cars

by **Mr.DGAF** » Mar 28th, '14, 19:54

I liked it. The oil bar at the beginning threw me off, I guess you were going for the hold em/oil scheme which kinda works. Seems a tad forced doe. The rest of it was pretty good though. This little part made me laugh though.

"If it's a real gun then fuck it they're some savages
I ain't messing with them..."

It went from like something of a brag rap to very self-aware haha, it was funny but in a good way. Good stuff mane.

by **Just Silver** » Mar 28th, '14, 19:57

Thanks guy and yea I used a different inflection with that bar

by **SandMan** » Mar 28th, '14, 20:21

Not a bad verse but I couldnt really catch the flow and I think it is due to the isolated lines that had nothing to rhyme and also it could be just the way I'm trying to read it.

by **Just Silver** » Mar 28th, '14, 22:03

SandMan wrote:Not a bad verse but I couldnt really catch the flow and I think it is due to the isolated lines that had nothing to rhyme and also it could be just the way I'm trying to read it.

Thanks guy probably should've put commas to break it up for the reader :sweating:

by **Just Silver** » Mar 30th, '14, 23:22

Last bump new project

by **Dewey Decimal** » Mar 31st, '14, 02:14

Spoke your mind , pulled it off real well. Nice job silver

by **Just Silver** » Jun 7th, '14, 01:51

Last bump

by **Just Silver** » Aug 1st, '14, 15:34

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