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Fa-Q's back looking to collaborate

Postby Fa-Q » May 27th, '14, 09:59

I make molesting a habit, titty fucked Jessica Rabbit,
Told her that was my wand, and the rest is just magic,
At best I'm an addict, I just made a mess in the attic,
(Cumming uncontrollably) Three shots on her chest is a hat trick,
My temper's weak, we should invest in a mattress,
I gotta catch up, I'm so far behind, that Harry Houdini,
Is still very new to me, I like Katy Perry's BOOkini,
Her and I got so high together, we made the moon rova' queasy,
She said she liked Hova, Yeezy, and she was ova' Weezy,
Welp, I came inside her, and made her eggs ova easy,
She made me get another stiffy dude, at a jiffy lube,
So nervous, that the bitch gave me pissy pubes,
I have to leave her, now I got the pick of the litter,
and my pick is to git my dick and stick it in shitters,
and escape every strip club glist'ning with glitter,
And teach their bra sizes the ABC's,
but then they'll always want the D,
So I'll hop 'em up on E, F 'em, then blow a G,


Little freestyle I wrote really quickly...I'm looking to collaborate with someone

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Re: Fa-Q's back looking to collaborate

Postby Just Silver » May 27th, '14, 16:21

Ill collab
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Re: Fa-Q's back looking to collaborate

Postby Fa-Q » May 28th, '14, 01:12

Menzo wrote:Gotta provide that link of feed, fam :b:

Sorry, didn't know you guys did that rule still
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Re: Fa-Q's back looking to collaborate

Postby Just Silver » Jun 1st, '14, 08:46

Multis are cool but some seem very forced

Vocab was decent nothing special but for a hiatus this is pretty damn good
Just work on a versatile flow and you're good :y:
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Postby Sam. » Jun 1st, '14, 22:00

Pretty nasty for a freestyle don't you think? Title:"Sleezy" - is what best suits this verse. I don't care about the Rhymes but, you seemed to struggle with the Multis as places. I can't really pin-point the locations where I felt the struggle, but, yeah, it's there. Anyway, 6/10 for the effort. :y:
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