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Freestyle written

Postby Supershade » Jun 7th, '14, 15:41

Just a fuck about but let me know what you think :y:


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I've been eating dead worms
don't be surprised if I spit flem germs
All over your Ben sherms
When I write my pen squirms
Trying to get free
You'll find out after you've met me
When I shit pet feed all over where your friends meet
Laughing as it comes out
I cum loud when I hear the gun sound
Louder than a thunder cloud
I wonder how my shrink would sound
When I run him down
Would probably cost me a hundred pounds
leave the faggot underground
Cause I can’t explain to y’all how dang exhausted my legs felt, just having to balance my dang self but on eggshells I was made to walk but thank you, ma, ‘cause that gave me the strength to cause Shady-mania
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Re: Freestyle written

Postby shadyblogger » Jun 7th, '14, 16:05

Nice rhyming and short little lines but content could be improved. But I get it, a short verse packed with nice little rhymes. It's good for what it is.
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Re: Freestyle written

Postby Supershade » Jun 7th, '14, 16:17

Blogs McGooch wrote:Nice rhyming and short little lines but content could be improved. But I get it, a short verse packed with nice little rhymes. It's good for what it is.

Cheers :y:
Cause I can’t explain to y’all how dang exhausted my legs felt, just having to balance my dang self but on eggshells I was made to walk but thank you, ma, ‘cause that gave me the strength to cause Shady-mania
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