New shit I just recorded...

[Block]

Ok, made this to mess around with CEP2 editing.. I really wanna get a sick hook on this and re-record it with a nice mic/some good equip.

You can be harsh on the critique, please do.. I strive off getting better. I know it's off-flow in some spots, and I basically know what I've done wrong here, but as I said I didn't record it to be 'great'.. I recorded it just to mess around with CEP.. Tell me what you think tho?

http://www.soundclick.com/siinide

Click 'Apocolypse freestyle' - It's not really a freestyle, but whatever..



my pen breeds destruction, of apocolyptic proportions
descending demons from my writes, gripping and scorching
Ripping and torchering, innocent victims from porches
picture it, morbid, you've never seen sicker before it
perform an abortion, and force in, a wick in and torch it
Annihilate any signs of life that your throughts might be forming
And fuck anyone that has taught here before me
You should pick up and leave and just stop performing
my cannibalistic sense will devour enemies
I'm like Bush in his war for oil-powered energy
And the third reicht failed, so now they're sending me
To wage war in ya minds, epidemically
But see I've strayed from the course, an indomidable force
I conquer brain waves and call it surfing the shore
While infecting young minds like getting dirt in a sore
No You don't count as vets, cuz you were hurt in the war
As I'm burning ya core, it's no fiction, picture as the morticians
Drag bodies off the fields with limbs hanging and more missing
Watch as the gore glistens, off, the severed throats of the poor victims
It's a grousem thought, you can't just ignore, listen
SiiNiDE explore physics, and I adorn fission
Chemically split cells, leave axis of your core twisted


I'm out..

[Rain Matrix]

If they got a problem with that...

...no one on this site rhymes

keep it tight bro

...rain is offically out

[Makaveli525]

What I see here is... you got dope lyrics, dope flow, everything... just it kinda sounds like you're whispering, you could put a little more umph into your voice.

But other than that, nice drop, keep it up

[Xray]

speak up i cant even hear what your saying..your flow has no energy in it at all which you need if you wanna make this song a success..your lyrics are nice and the beat is dope but whats lyrics if you cant spit it right?